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Bread Making Failed

My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread. We bought an electric home use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high. We have never baked bread before because we don't know how to make it.
We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, egg, and yeast for her. She did that hard and seriously. We were not surprised to see the final result this evening, you can see the picture I attached here below.
Yes, the first tray of bread she made failed. The bread can be eaten but not soft. The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cough, so proof dough failed.
We will be doing better next time I believe.

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Bread Making Failed

My daughter said that she wanted to make (some) bread by herself this morning,. I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

美味しそう！

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We bought an electric ~~home use~~ oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high.

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We have never baked bread before because we don't know how to make it.

We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, egg, and yeast for her.

She diused th~~at hard and serious~~em diligently and earnestly.

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We were not surprised to see the final result this evening~~, y~~. You can see the picture I attached here below.

It's not that bad.

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Yes, the first tray of bread she made failed.

The bread can be eaten but it's not soft.

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The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough, so proofing the dough failed.

大切ですね。

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We will ~~be doing~~do better next time, I believe.

賛成した！

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上手に書けています。

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Scarlett_farther

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Dec. 5, 2022, 1:08 a.m.

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mari

My daughter said that she wanted to make (some) bread by herself this morning,. I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.
美味しそう！

It seems that there are not many words to praise a dish in Japanese, most of them are "美味し", and even native Japanese only speak this word. There are many words like "delicious, " "delectable" and "sweet"..in English. And of course, that's because I don't know.

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Scarlett_farther

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Dec. 5, 2022, 1:11 a.m.

ありがとうございました、あなたはとても親切だね。:-)

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mari

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Dec. 5, 2022, 1:13 a.m.

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Scarlett_farther

It seems that there are not many words to praise a dish in Japanese, most of them are "美味し", and even native Japanese only speak this word. There are many words like "delicious, " "delectable" and "sweet"..in English. And of course, that's because I don't know.

My favorite in English is probably, "Yum!" "That looks awesome!" is another one I use often. :)

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motte 1.17

Bread Making Failed

My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, so I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

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We bought an electric home -use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide, and 60cm high.

or you could just cut "home-use" since it's kind of implied

We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, eggs, and yeast for her.

just going based on the title and the ingredients here... i'm thinking the eggs may have something to do with the fail lol

She ~~did that hard and seriously~~took it seriously and worked very hard on it.

I think that was what your sentence meant - you can do something seriously, but "she did that hard" sounds.... very strange

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The bread can be eaten but ~~not soft~~it's too dense.

going back to this after reading that you thought proofing was the problem (i wasn't sure what "soft" meant originally): bread can be too dense if it doesn't have a lot of air bubbles in it. if you don't let your dough proof properly, the gluten in it won't stretch while it bakes to let the air pockets form, making a really heavy, dense bread, that's edible but not very good haha.

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough~~, so proof dough failed~~ during proofing.

i'm guessing cough was just a typo, and if you want to talk about bread that has already undergone proofing, you call it "proofed dough" with a soft F sound, not like V

We will ~~be doing~~do better next time I believe.

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the photo didn't look too bad! and since i know some stuff about making bread, here's some advice:

the eggs + proofing were probably the biggest issues. both of them prevent the proper development of gluten. most breads have no egg whatsoever, and while some have butter, most are just flour, water, salt, and yeast, and maybe sugar. butter and eggs are fats which ruin gluten development. without gluten, the bread can't retain its shape when an air bubble forms inside. instead of the bread growing around it, the air bubble will just pop and escape the bread, making it very dense. (this is how cakes work! cakes have tons of fats like eggs, butter, and oil, and so they need stuff like baking soda or baking powder to rise.) proofing is supposed to allow gluten in the bread to develop also, so if that got messed up too then the bread probably didn't have enough gluten :( but hopefully the next attempt will go better!

i feel like this is confirming to me that i watch too many baking videos... lol

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Scarlett_farther

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Dec. 5, 2022, 12:49 a.m.

Thank you very much!
Yes, 'not soft' should be changed to 'dense', and 'cough' was a typo of 'dough'.
It's amazing and most of us don't know that some bread has no eggs, you are kind of professional in baking.

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motte

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Dec. 5, 2022, 3:58 p.m.

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Scarlett_farther

Thank you very much! Yes, 'not soft' should be changed to 'dense', and 'cough' was a typo of 'dough'. It's amazing and most of us don't know that some bread has no eggs, you are kind of professional in baking.

haha i wouldn't say professional but thank you so much! write about how the next attempt goes :D

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My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

My daughter said that she wanted to make (some) bread by herself this morning,. I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

美味しそう！

Grammar

My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, so I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

Stylistic

We bought an electric home use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high.

We bought an electric ~~home use~~ oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high.

Usage

We bought an electric home -use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide, and 60cm high.

or you could just cut "home-use" since it's kind of implied

We have never baked bread before because we don't know how to make it.

We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, egg, and yeast for her.

We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, eggs, and yeast for her.

just going based on the title and the ingredients here... i'm thinking the eggs may have something to do with the fail lol

She did that hard and seriously.

She diused th~~at hard and serious~~em diligently and earnestly.

Usage

She ~~did that hard and seriously~~took it seriously and worked very hard on it.

I think that was what your sentence meant - you can do something seriously, but "she did that hard" sounds.... very strange

Usage Stylistic

We were not surprised to see the final result this evening, you can see the picture I attached here below.

We were not surprised to see the final result this evening~~, y~~. You can see the picture I attached here below.

It's not that bad.

Grammar

Yes, the first tray of bread she made failed.

The bread can be eaten but not soft.

The bread can be eaten but it's not soft.

Grammar

The bread can be eaten but ~~not soft~~it's too dense.

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cough, so proof dough failed.

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough, so proofing the dough failed.

大切ですね。

Usage

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough~~, so proof dough failed~~ during proofing.

i'm guessing cough was just a typo, and if you want to talk about bread that has already undergone proofing, you call it "proofed dough" with a soft F sound, not like V

We will be doing better next time I believe.

We will ~~be doing~~do better next time, I believe.

賛成した！

Grammar Usage

We will ~~be doing~~do better next time I believe.

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