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Scarlett_farther

Dec 04

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Bread Making Failed

My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread. We bought an electric home use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high. We have never baked bread before because we don't know how to make it.
We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, egg, and yeast for her. She did that hard and seriously. We were not surprised to see the final result this evening, you can see the picture I attached here below.
Yes, the first tray of bread she made failed. The bread can be eaten but not soft. The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cough, so proof dough failed.
We will be doing better next time I believe.

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My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

My daughter said that she wanted to make (some) bread by herself this morning,. I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

美味しそう!
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My daughter said that she wanted to make some bread by herself this morning, so I encouraged her, and all of us were looking forward to enjoying the fresh bread.

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We bought an electric home use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high.

We bought an electric home use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide and 60cm high.

Usage

We bought an electric home -use oven which is 50cm long, 50cm wide, and 60cm high.

or you could just cut "home-use" since it's kind of implied
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We have never baked bread before because we don't know how to make it.

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We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, egg, and yeast for her.

We prepared some essential ingredients like flour, butter, eggs, and yeast for her.

just going based on the title and the ingredients here... i'm thinking the eggs may have something to do with the fail lol

She did that hard and seriously.

She diused that hard and seriousem diligently and earnestly.

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She did that hard and seriouslytook it seriously and worked very hard on it.

I think that was what your sentence meant - you can do something seriously, but "she did that hard" sounds.... very strange
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We were not surprised to see the final result this evening, you can see the picture I attached here below.

We were not surprised to see the final result this evening, y. You can see the picture I attached here below.

It's not that bad.
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Yes, the first tray of bread she made failed.

The bread can be eaten but not soft.

The bread can be eaten but it's not soft.

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The bread can be eaten but not softit's too dense.

going back to this after reading that you thought proofing was the problem (i wasn't sure what "soft" meant originally): bread can be too dense if it doesn't have a lot of air bubbles in it. if you don't let your dough proof properly, the gluten in it won't stretch while it bakes to let the air pockets form, making a really heavy, dense bread, that's edible but not very good haha.

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cough, so proof dough failed.

The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough, so proofing the dough failed.

大切ですね。
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The key mistake is probably due to not fully covering the cdough, so proof dough failed during proofing.

i'm guessing cough was just a typo, and if you want to talk about bread that has already undergone proofing, you call it "proofed dough" with a soft F sound, not like V

We will be doing better next time I believe.

We will be doingdo better next time, I believe.

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We will be doingdo better next time I believe.

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