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Book - A Shot in the Dark - P36

Part thirty-six.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it.)

So, Twitten comes across Brunswick and Steine on his way to the train station. Unfortunately for Steine and Brunswick, Twitten has bad news: Joanna Carver escaped from the police cell last night, though her alibi has been confirmed by her employer, Alec Forrester is obviously innocent, a journalist from London is waiting for Steine at the police station. But the worst is yet to come; Twitten confirms Brunswick’s fears. Indeed, Twitten apprises them of his pursuing all possible leads to link Crystal’s murder to the long-ago “Aldersgate Stick-up”. Moreover, Twitten tells them about his upcoming meeting with Crystal’s secretary, Miss Sibert, as well as about his request to the ‘Theatre Royal’ of a copy of the play.

When Twitten is gone, Brunswick’s face gives way to a defeated expression. Sgt. Brunswick had* just asked Inspector Steine to disregard anything that Twitten does or finds concerning the underway police inquiries; and yet Steine listened to Twitten without objecting. Steine apologises to Brunswick, and says that he was taken by surprise. However, the truth is that as Twitten spoke, Steine took in almost nothing; he even asks Brunswick if Twitten mentioned something about Joanna Carver.

*”had just asked” or “just asked” ? Time line: Brunswick asks Steine “not to listen” Twitten. Then Twitten turns up and speak to them. (I don’t know if it’s clearer)

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Book - A Shot in the Dark - P36

Part thirty-six.

This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )

So, Twitten comes across Brunswick and Steine on his way to the train station.

Unfortunately for Steine and Brunswick, Twitten has bad news: Joanna Carver escaped from the police cell last night, though her alibi has been confirmed by her employer, Alec Forrester is obviously innocent, a journalist from London is waiting for Steine at the police station.

But the worst is yet to come; Twitten confirms Brunswick’s fears.

Indeed, Twitten apprises them of his pursuing all possible leads to link Crystal’s murder to the long-ago “Aldersgate Stick-up”.

Moreover, Twitten tells them about his upcoming meeting with Crystal’s secretary, Miss Sibert, as well as about his request to the ‘Theatre Royal’ of a copy of the play.

When Twitten is gone, Brunswick’s face gives way to a defeated expression.

Sgt.

Brunswick had* just asked Inspector Steine to disregard anything that Twitten does or finds concerning the underwayongoing police inquiries; and yet Steine listeneds to Twitten without objecting.

Steine apologises to Brunswick, and says that he was taken by surprise.

However, the truth is that as Twitten spoke, Steine took in almost nothing; he even asksed Brunswick if Twitten mentioned something about Joanna Carver.

This sentence is all in the past tense

*”had just asked” or “just asked” ?

I would use just asked

Time line: Brunswick asks Steine “not to listen” to Twitten.

Then Twitten turns up and speaks to them.

(I don’t know if it’s clearer)

Thanks it is clear.

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Jan. 22, 2022

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Brunswick had* just asked Inspector Steine to disregard anything that Twitten does or finds concerning the underwayongoing police inquiries; and yet Steine listeneds to Twitten without objecting.

But Twitten was gone. They had already talked. Time line: Brunswik and Steine chat. Brunswik tells Steine to disregard whatever Twitten does concerning the investigations. Twitten turns up. Twitten tells them about his "personal" inquiry. Twitten goes away. Brunswick in his mind: "I'd just told Steine not to listen to Twitten, and what did Steine do just now?! He listened to Twitten without objecting."

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Jan. 22, 2022

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Thanks

Book - A Shot in the Dark - P36

Part thirty-six.

This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )

So, Twitten comes across Brunswick and Steine on his way to the train station.

Unfortunately for Steine and Brunswick, Twitten has bad news: Joanna Carver escaped from the police cell last night, though her alibi has been confirmed by her employer, Alec Forrester is obviously innocent, a journalist from London is waiting for Steine at the police station.

But the worst is yet to come; Twitten confirms Brunswick’s fears.

Indeed, Twitten apprises them of his pursuing all possible leads to link Crystal’s murder to the long-ago “Aldersgate Stick-up”.

Moreover, Twitten tells them about his upcoming meeting with Crystal’s secretary, Miss Sibert, as well as about his request to the ‘Theatre Royal’ of a copy of the play.

When Twitten is gone, Brunswick’s face gives way to a defeated expression.

Sgt.

Sgt.

Brunswick had* just asked Inspector Steine to disregard anything that Twitten does or finds concerning the underway police inquiries; and yet Steine listened to Twitten without objecting.

Brunswick had* just asked Inspector Steine to disregard anything that Twitten does or finds concerning the underwayongoing police inquiries; and yet Steine listeneds to Twitten without objecting.

Steine apologises to Brunswick, and says that he was taken by surprise.

However, the truth is that as Twitten spoke, Steine took in almost nothing; he even asks Brunswick if Twitten mentioned something about Joanna Carver.

However, the truth is that as Twitten spoke, Steine took in almost nothing; he even asksed Brunswick if Twitten mentioned something about Joanna Carver.

*”had just asked” or “just asked” ?

*”had just asked” or “just asked” ?

Time line: Brunswick asks Steine “not to listen” Twitten.

Time line: Brunswick asks Steine “not to listen” to Twitten.

Then Twitten turns up and speak to them.

Then Twitten turns up and speaks to them.

(I don’t know if it’s clearer)

(I don’t know if it’s clearer)

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