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Book - A Shot in the Dark - P35

Part thirty-five.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it.)

Today, Inspector Steine is quite cheerful on his way to the police station. The weather is sunny, a nice cup of tea will be ready on his arrival, and above all no police activities underway—save for two murder inquiries, which he has already forgotten about. Hence, Brunswick’s thoughtful expression deeply irks Steine. Sighing, he asks what is the matter. Brunswick poures all his doubts out to the Inspector: they have to cross-check Joanna Carver’s alibi against witness’ reports, while they might have been too quick to dismiss Alec Forrester’s. At present, they cannot actually convict him for the killing of A.S. Crystal, which happened at 7:45 on yesterday’s afternoon. Many witnesses has* confirmed he had been drinking in a pub since 3:30 in the afternoon. And he remained there until the police had** turned up to arrest him. Steine takes only one thing from that: it will means rethinking the whole investigation. Just the thought horrifies him. He hopes that Brunswick agrees on Joanna Carver’s guilt at least. Again, Brunswick’s answer is kind of a political one, not too straight to the point, while making sure you get the meaning across—which is that Joanna Carver cannot be Braithwaite’s murderer. Nonetheless, he concludes his speech acknowledging she must be at least in on it, giving the evidence found in her dressing room. The two of them stand awkwardly silent on the pavement, both in deep thought. Steine senses there is more to that. Indeed, Brunswick is concerned that Twitten’s being too clever may actually overcomplicate the underway investigations. Brunswick breaks off when he sees Twitten approaching from further down the street.

*”has confirmed” or “confirmed” ? I suppose the witness’ statments were “taken” there and then (at the pub)

**”had turned up” or “turned up” ? The police did arrest him. He didn’t flee.

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Book - A Shot in the Dark - P35

Part thirty-five.

A period is not needed here since this is not a complete sentence.

This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )

Today, Inspector Steine is quite cheerful on his way to the police station.

The weather is sunny, a nice cup of tea will be ready upon his arrival, and above all, there no police activities underway—save for two murder inquiries, which he has already forgotten about.

Hence, Brunswick’s thoughtful expression deeply irks Steine.

Sighing, he asks what is the matter.

Brunswick poures all his doubts out to the Inspector: they have to cross-check Joanna Carver’s alibi against witness reports, whileand they might have been too quick to dismiss Alec Forrester’s (what?).

They were too quick to dismiss Alec Forrester's what?

At present, they cannot actually convict him for the killing of A.S. Crystal, which happened at 7:45 on yesterday’s afternoonthe previous evening.

Many witnesses has*ve confirmed hethat Alec had been drinking in a pub since 3:30 in the afternoon.

AndThey have also said that he remained there until the police had** turned up to arrest him.

Steine takes only one thing from that: ithey will meansneed to rethinking the whole investigation.

Just the thought of it horrifies him.

He hopes that Brunswick agrees on Joanna Carver’s guilt at least.

Again, Brunswick’s answer is kind of a political one, not too straight to the point, while making sure you get thestill getting his meaning across—which is that Joanna Carver cannot be Braithwaite’s murderer.

Nonetheless, he concludes his speech acknowledging she must be at least be in on it, givingen the evidence found in her dressing room.

The two of them stand in awkwardly silentce on the pavement, both in deep thought.

Steine senses there is more to thait.

Indeed, Brunswick is concerned that Twitten’s being too clever may actually overcomplicate the underway investigations currently.

Brunswick breaks off when he sees Twitten approaching from further down the street.

I suppose the witness statements were “taken” there and then (at the pub)

**”had turned up” or “turned up” ?"Turned up" is best there!

The police did arrest him.

He didn’t flee.

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samu

Jan. 21, 2022

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Thanks a lot! Your corrections are very helpful

Book - A Shot in the Dark - P35

Part thirty-five.

Part thirty-five.

This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place as you read it. )

Today, Inspector Steine is quite cheerful on his way to the police station.

The weather is sunny, a nice cup of tea will be ready on his arrival, and above all no police activities underway—save for two murder inquiries, which he has already forgotten about.

The weather is sunny, a nice cup of tea will be ready upon his arrival, and above all, there no police activities underway—save for two murder inquiries, which he has already forgotten about.

Hence, Brunswick’s thoughtful expression deeply irks Steine.

Sighing, he asks what is the matter.

Brunswick poures all his doubts out to the Inspector: they have to cross-check Joanna Carver’s alibi against witness’ reports, while they might have been too quick to dismiss Alec Forrester’s.

Brunswick poures all his doubts out to the Inspector: they have to cross-check Joanna Carver’s alibi against witness reports, whileand they might have been too quick to dismiss Alec Forrester’s (what?).

At present, they cannot actually convict him for the killing of A.S. Crystal, which happened at 7:45 on yesterday’s afternoon.

At present, they cannot actually convict him for the killing of A.S. Crystal, which happened at 7:45 on yesterday’s afternoonthe previous evening.

Many witnesses has* confirmed he had been drinking in a pub since 3:30 in the afternoon.

Many witnesses has*ve confirmed hethat Alec had been drinking in a pub since 3:30 in the afternoon.

And he remained there until the police had** turned up to arrest him.

AndThey have also said that he remained there until the police had** turned up to arrest him.

Steine takes only one thing from that: it will means rethinking the whole investigation.

Steine takes only one thing from that: ithey will meansneed to rethinking the whole investigation.

Just the thought horrifies him.

Just the thought of it horrifies him.

He hopes that Brunswick agrees on Joanna Carver’s guilt at least.

Again, Brunswick’s answer is kind of a political one, not too straight to the point, while making sure you get the meaning across—which is that Joanna Carver cannot be Braithwaite’s murderer.

Again, Brunswick’s answer is kind of a political one, not too straight to the point, while making sure you get thestill getting his meaning across—which is that Joanna Carver cannot be Braithwaite’s murderer.

Nonetheless, he concludes his speech acknowledging she must be at least in on it, giving the evidence found in her dressing room.

Nonetheless, he concludes his speech acknowledging she must be at least be in on it, givingen the evidence found in her dressing room.

The two of them stand awkwardly silent on the pavement, both in deep thought.

The two of them stand in awkwardly silentce on the pavement, both in deep thought.

Steine senses there is more to that.

Steine senses there is more to thait.

Indeed, Brunswick is concerned that Twitten’s being too clever may actually overcomplicate the underway investigations.

Indeed, Brunswick is concerned that Twitten’s being too clever may actually overcomplicate the underway investigations currently.

Brunswick breaks off when he sees Twitten approaching from further down the street.

*”has confirmed” or “confirmed” ?

I suppose the witness’ statments were “taken” there and then (at the pub)

I suppose the witness statements were “taken” there and then (at the pub)

**”had turned up” or “turned up” ?

**”had turned up” or “turned up” ?"Turned up" is best there!

The police did arrest him.

He didn’t flee.

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