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Akilos

Firstly, my superher's name is Akilos. He has a blue armour all over his body, he has a little yellow hair and and ice crystal on top of his stick. He als had a shield in his left arm.
Next, he has a lot of incredible superpowers which help him when he is battling agains villians. Some of them are, that he can fly, he can throw out ice out of his crystal and taht he has a superspeed.
He is here to kill villians. Because they kill other people in city.

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Akilos

Firstly, my superhero's name is Akilos.

He has a blue armour all over his body, he has a littleshort yellow hair and and ice crystal on top of his stick.

Instead of saying "yellow", you can say "blond".

He also had a shield in his left arm.

Next, he has a lot of incredible superpowers which help him when he is battling against villians.

Some of them are, that he can fly, he can throw out ice out of his crystal, and taht he has a superspeed.

He is here to kill villians because they kill other people in the city.

Because they kill other people in cityYou should try not to start a sentence with "Because".

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dubrakva

Jan. 9, 2022

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Akilos

Firstly, my superher's name is Akilos.

Firstly, my superhero's name is Akilos.

He has a blue armour all over his body, he has a little yellow hair and and ice crystal on top of his stick.

He has a blue armour all over his body, he has a littleshort yellow hair and and ice crystal on top of his stick.

He als had a shield in his left arm.

He also had a shield in his left arm.

Next, he has a lot of incredible superpowers which help him when he is battling agains villians.

Next, he has a lot of incredible superpowers which help him when he is battling against villians.

Some of them are, that he can fly, he can throw out ice out of his crystal and taht he has a superspeed.

Some of them are, that he can fly, he can throw out ice out of his crystal, and taht he has a superspeed.

He is here to kill villians.

He is here to kill villians because they kill other people in the city.

Because they kill other people in city.

Because they kill other people in cityYou should try not to start a sentence with "Because".

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