March 23, 2022
Abandoned ghost town
Near the small lake there was an old and abandoned castle. He looked creepy and scary. People were curious, so they decided to visit him. Everything was dark at the entrance. It looked lifeless. When they got into it, they had to open their eyes wide and hold their breath. Through the castle began to howl the wind, there was a creak and mysteriously ghosts began to float on it. The castle has become creepy. Ghosts were preying on the timids. Blood walls and dead bodies were everywhere. People's blood was freezing in their veins and they had tingling sensations in their spines, they were browsy. Ghosts frightened people. They were ominously decapitated flying around the castle. People were numb with fear, screaming and running. They realized the old castle was a scary place. No people have entered the castle since. Many call it a abandoned ghost town.
Abandoned ghost town
Near the small lake there was an old and abandoned castle.
HeIt looked creepy and scary.
People were curious, so they decided to visit him.it.
As a castle is a place not a person you use IT to refer to it.
Everything was dark at the entrance.
It looked lifeless.
When they got into it, they had to open their eyes wide and hold their breath.
Through the castlee wind began to howl the windrough the castle, there was a creak and mysteriously ghosts began to float on it.
The castle hasd become creepy.
Ghosts were preying on the timids people.
Bloody walls ( or walls covered in blood) and dead bodies were everywhere.
People's blood was freezing in their veins and, they had tingling sensations in their spines, and they were bdrowsy.
Ghosts frightened people.
They were ominously, decapitated and flying around the castle.
People were numb with fear, screaming and running.
They realized the old castle was a scary place.
No peoplebody haves entered the castle since.
Many call it an abandoned ghost town.
March 27, 2022
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Abandoned ghost town
Near the small lake there was an old and abandoned castle.
HeIt looked creepy and scary.
Usually only people or animals are called "he" or "she." Objects like houses are usually "it", unless you want to make the house seem like a person.
People were curious, so they decided to visit himit.
Everything was dark at the entrance.
It looked lifeless.
When they got into it, they had to opened their eyes wide and hoeld their breath.
"They had to" suggests there was some rule that made them act that way, instead of it being their emotional response.
Through the castlee wind began to howl the wind, trough the castle. There was a creak and mysteriously ghosts began to float on itaround.
The castle hasd become creepy.
Ghosts were preying on the timids.
Bloody walls and dead bodies were everywhere.
People's blood was freezing in their veins and they had tingling sensations in their spines, t. They were bdrowsy.
Not sure what browsy means. Maybe drowsy?
Ghosts frightened people.
They were ominously decapitated flying around the castle.
People were numb with fear, screaming and running.
They realized the old castle was a scary place.
No people have entered the castle since.
Many call it an abandoned ghost town.
I wouldn't call a castle a ghost town, I'd only use that for an actual down that was haunted or deserted.
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March 27, 2022
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Abandoned ghost town |
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Near the small lake there was an old and abandoned castle. Near the small lake there was an old |
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He looked creepy and scary.
Usually only people or animals are called "he" or "she." Objects like houses are usually "it", unless you want to make the house seem like a person.
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People were curious, so they decided to visit him. People were curious, so they decided to visit As a castle is a place not a person you use IT to refer to it.
People were curious, so they decided to visit |
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Everything was dark at the entrance. |
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It looked lifeless. |
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When they got into it, they had to open their eyes wide and hold their breath. When they got into it, "They had to" suggests there was some rule that made them act that way, instead of it being their emotional response.
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Through the castle began to howl the wind, there was a creak and mysteriously ghosts began to float on it. Th Th |
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The castle has become creepy. The castle ha The castle The castle ha |
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Ghosts were preying on the timids. Ghosts were preying on the timid Ghosts were preying on the timid |
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Blood walls and dead bodies were everywhere. Bloody walls ( or walls covered in blood) and dead bodies were everywhere. Bloody walls and dead bodies were everywhere. |
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People's blood was freezing in their veins and they had tingling sensations in their spines, they were browsy. People's blood was freezing in their veins People's blood was freezing in their veins and they had tingling sensations in their spines Not sure what browsy means. Maybe drowsy?
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Ghosts frightened people. |
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They were ominously decapitated flying around the castle. They were ominous |
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People were numb with fear, screaming and running. |
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They realized the old castle was a scary place. |
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No people have entered the castle since. No |
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Many call it a abandoned ghost town. Many call it an abandoned ghost town. Many call it an abandoned ghost town. I wouldn't call a castle a ghost town, I'd only use that for an actual down that was haunted or deserted.
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