April 4, 2021
At the beginning it was my two ""parents"" (I put "" because they don't deserve that title, long story) and me. 4 years later my sister was born, we never got along in childhood. 6 years later (when I had 10 y. o.) my brother was born.
At 15 years old "HE" (I wrote it in a specific way to emphasize my hate to that person) had to leave my house, my scholar psychologist talked with my mom and gived a warning, If he didn't leave the house my psychologist was going to call the police.
Now I have more than 18 years old, I don't want to be exact.
What happened? Why does it sounds so shady?
I was born when my mother didn't finished school, neither him. He was an alcoholic abuser, a corrupted police, a thief as security guard. My mom was someone with many problems, insecurities and her own family was the same or worst. A child in that conditions couldn't end fine.
"HE" was a physical, verbal and sexual abuser. I'm not gonna shut up with it, he was the worst shit. We suffered a lot, we have many traumas even now, many years later.
I don't want to get into details, it's painful.
I hated my mother for many years when I was teen, because she didn't changed anything. I was so tired and mad with everything, so angry. I was giving up with everything: my life, my family and the world. I was so hopeless.
Some day came a woman to the class, she introduced herself: Hello everyone, my name is Andrea and I'm psychologist.
Andrea was the unique light among those dark years, I'll not be here without her help.
Because of everything I was an insecure, hostil and distrustful person. But I decided to ask for help, many years passed and she gived to me all the atetion and help that I needed at that time.
Since "HE" leaved the house, my mother changed gradually. How she changed I changed my feeling to her too, I don't hate her now, but I can't forgive all the suffering. She wanted a boy before being 20 years old. I didn't decided to exist, she decided it. She, knowing everything decided to have a kid with the first stupid that found, a kid to be used as an object to take out all her angry.
Of course, How could a 4 years old child be able to fight two stupid shits?!
I'm sorry, I'm holding my tears, I want to cry.
I hate this question, I don't have a real family. I feel so alone. I don't know what is miss your mother, laugh with you father, I don't know how is that feeling.
My mother is a better person now, my siblings are happy and in better conditions, they got the mother that I never had, and I'm happy for them. She is saving money now, she has goals, she is studying at university.
I know that she regrets for all the things of the past. She worries about me, supports me and doesn't pressure me. But she isn't my mom, I don't feel that. I see someone with blood ties that regrets and try to fix the things. I can forgive many things but that doesn't repair anything.
Have a mom isn't a blood tie or title, is a conecction, a feeling that cames from the inside. And I don't have that feeling, I'm empty.
When I read people saying "I miss my mom" "I love my mom", I just feel that empty space and I repeat to myself "How is that feeling? Is it warm? Does it gives you security or calm?".
Believe me, I'm not the most sad and poor person of the world, but my childhood and adolescence was horrible.
How much? Am I exaggerating?
I suffered insomnia because I was terrified thinking that maybe my alcoholic """FATHER""" could rape me when I was sleeping. Everyday was humiliations and threats. My mother tried to kick me out because I said, in a really calmed way "I don't think is okay force my sister to play something she doesn't want to". I ran to the bathroom to help my brother, otherwise """HE""" will hit him because his stupid brain can't do anything withouth hit someone. What does he said? "Dale las gracias a tu hermana porque sino ¡te habría sacado la mierda!". In English, something like "Thank your sister, otherwise I would taken the shit out of you!".
"Sacado la mierda" is an expression to threat with hits.
"Crazy", "Without marks there's no pain", "I'll give you a real reason to cry". I can't forget those words. Fortunately I forget the most part of bad things.
Those stupid pieces of....
Seriously... I can't with this...
I'm sweating and holding my tears at the same time.
Even If my mother is a good person now, she can't erase anything of that shit of past that I had.
So, I tried to change my family and I did it. That changed the life of my siblings.
I'm trying to get over it, but is so hard.
At least now I can smile, I'm recovering from all of that. I'm working on it.
So, a mother and two siblings. That's all.
I guess I'll have many errors, I'm not gonna check it soon. When I was kid I obssesed with "perfection" because that's what my mother wanted, a sad and stupid "perfect daughter".
She said to me many times, that I was the perfect child for her. But I can't feel that. Even now I'm a bit obssessed with errors, mistakes and defects.
I was so near to end with everything. Well, my mother was near to end with me and my sister when my grandmother died. I was 7 years old then.
At the end there's only a sad person with mental problems and a deep hole inside her heart, holding all the memories and trying to fight.
I'm not married, I don't want to have kids or pets. If I'm not fine I'll not bring a little and fragile life into this to suffer.
Why do people have kids?
"Because they will care you when you are old" "Because I want a mini me" "Because they are cute" "Because people say that" "Because my parents want grandchildren" "Because all my friend have one" "Because is the only way to be complete" "Because we born for that" "Because I didn't used protection and we don't have option"
NO! I'm not gonna have kids for that simple reasons. I heard all these things from real parents and people who wants to have kids.
But I say no. I'm not gonna create a new life just because I can or I want. If I have a kid, I'll sure to give the best: a nice family, a good enviroment, a brilliant future and above all a safe space, a good life. I'm gonna think "What could that little criature want and need?.
A life is something so beautiful and fragile. I aprecciate it so much that I can't do it If I'm not enough, because I know how is to grow up in a terrible family.
If I forgot a word or something, I'm sorry, I was feeling more than thinking.
Although I'm not married, I have a boyfriend. He is the most important person in my life. We have problems sometimes as all the couples, but we progress. We learn with the time. He is the closest person for me, and I talk with him when I'm stressed and worried about something, specially If I'm remembering bad things or having nightmares.
Thanks for your time, I'll try to learn more about English.
AtIn the beginning it was my two ""parents"" (I put "" because they don't deserve that title, long story) and me.
At the beginning refers to physical space, in the beginning refers to time.
4 years later my sister was born,; we never got along inas childhoodren.
Or "during our childhood".
6 years later (when I hadwas 10 y. o.) my brother was born.
We don't "have" years (and certainly not "years old") in English.
We say either "when I was 10" or "when I was 10 years old".
At 15 years oldf age "HE" (I wrote it in a specific way to emphasize my hate tored towards that person) had to leave my house, my scholar. My psychologist talked with my mom and giaved a this warning, I: if he didn't leave the house my psychologist was going toould call the police.
The expression "scholar psychologist" doesn't exist in English. A scholar is an academic who engages in research.
Now I have more thanam over 18 years old, I don't want to be exact.
Why does ithis sounds so shady?
I was born when my mother dihadn't finished school, and neither himad he.
You're talking about a past event that hadn't been completed before another past event, which triggers the past perfect.
He was an alcoholic and an abuser, a corrupted police,man, and a thief of as security guard.
Generally when talking about alcoholic addiction we use "alcoholic" as a noun. When used as an adjective it generally means that it has something to do with alcohol rather than alcoholics.
You could also put "police officer" (more formal) or "cop" (informal) instead of "policeman".
My mom was someone with many problems, and insecurities, and her own family was the same or worste.
A child in thatose conditions couldn't end up fine.
The word is "to end up". "To end" is a different word which means to terminate, finalise, bring to an end.
I'm not gonna shut up withabout it, he was the worst piece of shit.
He was the shit - he was great, awesome.
He was a piece of shit - he was awful.
We've suffered a lot,; we have many traumas even now, many years later.
We've suffered: up until the present.
We suffered is OK but this means a closed period in the past that is over.
I hated my mother for many years when I was a teen, because she didn't changed anything.
The auxiliary "do" triggers the root form of the verb. Verbs are not conjugated after "do".
I was so tired and mad withabout everything, so angry.
I washad givingen up withon everything: my life, my family and the world.
I wasfelt so hopeless.
To feel hopeless means to feel that you have there is no hope for you, to feel very pessimistic.
To be hopeless means to be bad at something, to be unskilled.
SomOne day came a woman to thecame to my class, and she introduced herself: "Hello everyone, my name is Andrea and I'm a psychologist."
Andrea was the uniqueonly light amongin those dark years, I'll no wouldn't be here without her help.
"Unique" means unlike other things, having characteristics that set it apart. It would mean she's a special kind of light compared to all the other people who were also light, but I think you're saying that she was the only light in the darkness.
Because of everyall things I was an insecure, hostile and distrustful person.
But I decided to ask for help,; many years passed and she giaved to me all the atetention and help that I needed at that time.
Since "HE" leavedft the house, my mother started changeding gradually.
HowAs she changed I changed my feelings to herwards her started changing too,; I don't hate her now, but I can't forgive her for all the suffering.
She wanted a boyson before beingthe age of 20 years old.
She, knowing everything, decided to have a kid with the first stupid thatidiot she found,; a kid to be used as an object to take out all her angryer on.
"Stupid" is an adjective. "Idiot" is a noun.
Of course, Hhow could a 4 years old child be able to fight two stupid shits?
a 4 year old = someone who is 4 years old
I'm sorry, I'm holding back my tears, I want to cry.
I don't know what ist is to miss your mother, laugh with you father, I don't know how iswhat that feeling is like.
We only invert the word order when asking questions, not when creating subordinate clauses with interrogative pronouns.
What IS that feeling like? (question)
I don't know what that feeling IS like. (statement)
My mother is a better person now, my siblings are happy and living in better conditions,; they've got the mother that I never had, and I'm happy for them.
"They got" is acceptable in some North American dialects, but is generally seen as too informal for writing.
She is saving money now, she has goals, she is studying at university.
I know that she regrets for all the those things ofin the past.
She worricares about me, supports me and doesn't pressure me.
"Worry" is fine but it implies that something bad is already happening, whereas "care" means she shows interest whether or not there is a crisis at foot.
I see someone with blood ties that feels regrets and tryis trying to fix the things.
"To regret" requires a direct object, so I've replaced it with "to feel regret" here. It could also be "that regrets everything", "that regrets certain things in the past", etc.
Tries to fix things would mean that she generally tries to fix different things, whereas trying to fix things means that she is currently working on fixing certain things.
Haveing a mom isn't a blood tie or title,: it's a connecction, a feeling that cames from the inside.
When I read people saying "I miss my mom" "I love my mom", I just feel that empty space and I repeat to myself "HowWhat is that feeling like?
Believe me,: I'm not the most sad and poorsaddest and most pitiful person ofin the world, but my childhood and adolescence wasere horrible.
Generally we only use "poor" to mean unlucky in interjections: "oh you poor thing"! Here you could put most pitiful, most pathetic, unluckiest, or something like that.
How muchhorrible?
Everyday there was humiliations and threats.
My mother tried to kick me out because I said, in a really calmed way "I don't think it is okay to force my sister to play something she doesn't want to".
I ran to the bathroom to help my brother, otherwise """HE""" willould hit him because his stupid brain caouldn't do anything withouth hitting someone.
Use "would" because it's in the past.
without + verb triggers the gerund
What does he said?
What did he say?
In English, something like "Thank your sister, otherwise I would have taken the shit out of you!
In English we have a similar expression: "to beat the shit out of someone".
"Sacado la mierda" is an expression to threaten with hitsbeating.
Threat is a noun, threaten is a verb.
Fortunately I've forget the most part ofotten most of the bad things.
I can't deal with this...
To express exasperation in English we'd say something like "I can't deal with this", "I (just) can't handle this", "I can't go on like this".
I'm sweating and holding back my tears at the same time.
To "hold" means to have in your hand.
To "hold back" means to stop from coming out.
Even Iif my mother is a good person now, she can't erase anything of thate shit of past that I hadI experienced in the past.
I'm trying to get over it, but it is so hard.
I guess I'll have many errors, I'm not gonna check it soonfor now.
She said told me many times, that I was the perfect child for her.
I was so nearclose to end with everythinging it all.
Well, my mother was nearclose to ending things with me and my sister when my grandmother died.
I was 7 years old then.
If I'm not fine I'll not bring a little and fragile life into this to suffer.
Why do people have kids?
"Because they will take care of you when you are old" "Because I want a mini me" "Because they are cute" "Because people say that you should" "Because my parents want grandchildren" "Because all my friend have one" "Because it is the only way to be complete" "Because we were born for that" "Because I didn't used protection and we don't have any other option"
I'm not gonna have kids for thatose simple reasons.
"reasons" is in the plural
I heard all these things from real parents and people who wantsed to have kids.
people is plural so it would be "want", and also "heard" is in the past so want should also be in the past (wanted)
I'm not gonna create a new life just because I can or I want to.
If I have a kid, I'll make sure to give them the best: a nice family, a good environment, a brilliant future and above all a safe space, a good life.
"Give" requires an indirect object ("them").
I'm gonna think "What could that little crieature want and need?.
I apprecciate it so much that I can't do it If I'm not good enough, because I know how it is to grow up in a terrible family.
If I forgot a word or something, I'm sorry, I was feeling more than thinking.
Although I'm not married, I have a boyfriend.
He is the most important person in my life.
We have problems sometimes as do all the couples, but we progresskeep moving forward.
Generic plural doesn't take the definite article in English. "All the couples" would mean a specific group of couples that both you and the reader know about: "all the couples here", "all the couples I mentioned", "all the couples in my life".
"but we're getting better" is another option for the second part.
We learn with theover time.
Time is a generic uncountable noun and doesn't take the definite article.
He is the closest person forperson that is the closest to me, and I talk with him when I'm stressed and worried about somethingtuff, especially If I'm remembering bad things or having nightmares.
special - unique
especially - particularly
Or "he's the most important person in my life", "he's my closest friend", etc.
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Overall a well-written text, most of the mistakes were little things around verbs (proper agreement and use of phrasal verbs), and things that were understandable but not idiomatic.
If this is truly your story I'm glad to hear you're in a better place and I hope sharing it here helped in your healing process. :) This is something that would be difficult to express in your native language so you should be proud of expressing it so well in your TL. Good luck on your English learning journey!
I'm not gonna shut up with it, he was the worst shit. I'm not gonna shut up He was the shit - he was great, awesome.
He was a piece of shit - he was awful. |
But I can't feel that. |
A small broken family |
At the beginning it was my two ""parents"" (I put "" because they don't deserve that title, long story) and me.
At the beginning refers to physical space, in the beginning refers to time.
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4 years later my sister was born, we never got along in childhood. 4 years later my sister was born Or "during our childhood".
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6 years later (when I had 10 y. o.) my brother was born. 6 years later (when I We don't "have" years (and certainly not "years old") in English.
We say either "when I was 10" or "when I was 10 years old". |
At 15 years old "HE" (I wrote it in a specific way to emphasize my hate to that person) had to leave my house, my scholar psychologist talked with my mom and gived a warning, If he didn't leave the house my psychologist was going to call the police. At 15 years o The expression "scholar psychologist" doesn't exist in English. A scholar is an academic who engages in research.
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Now I have more than 18 years old, I don't want to be exact. Now I |
What happened? |
Why does it sounds so shady? Why does |
I was born when my mother didn't finished school, neither him. I was born when my mother You're talking about a past event that hadn't been completed before another past event, which triggers the past perfect.
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He was an alcoholic abuser, a corrupted police, a thief as security guard. He was an alcoholic and an abuser, a corrupt Generally when talking about alcoholic addiction we use "alcoholic" as a noun. When used as an adjective it generally means that it has something to do with alcohol rather than alcoholics.
You could also put "police officer" (more formal) or "cop" (informal) instead of "policeman". |
My mom was someone with many problems, insecurities and her own family was the same or worst. My mom was someone with many problems |
A child in that conditions couldn't end fine. A child in th The word is "to end up". "To end" is a different word which means to terminate, finalise, bring to an end.
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"HE" was a physical, verbal and sexual abuser. |
We suffered a lot, we have many traumas even now, many years later. We've suffered a lot We've suffered: up until the present.
We suffered is OK but this means a closed period in the past that is over. |
I don't want to get into details, it's painful. |
I hated my mother for many years when I was teen, because she didn't changed anything. I hated my mother for many years when I was a teen, because she didn't change The auxiliary "do" triggers the root form of the verb. Verbs are not conjugated after "do".
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I was so tired and mad with everything, so angry. I was so tired and mad |
I was giving up with everything: my life, my family and the world. I |
I was so hopeless. I To feel hopeless means to feel that you have there is no hope for you, to feel very pessimistic.
To be hopeless means to be bad at something, to be unskilled. |
Some day came a woman to the class, she introduced herself: Hello everyone, my name is Andrea and I'm psychologist.
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Andrea was the unique light among those dark years, I'll not be here without her help. Andrea was the "Unique" means unlike other things, having characteristics that set it apart. It would mean she's a special kind of light compared to all the other people who were also light, but I think you're saying that she was the only light in the darkness.
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Because of everything I was an insecure, hostil and distrustful person. Because of |
But I decided to ask for help, many years passed and she gived to me all the atetion and help that I needed at that time. But I decided to ask for help |
Since "HE" leaved the house, my mother changed gradually. Since "HE" le |
How she changed I changed my feeling to her too, I don't hate her now, but I can't forgive all the suffering.
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She wanted a boy before being 20 years old. She wanted a |
I didn't decided to exist, she decided it. |
She, knowing everything decided to have a kid with the first stupid that found, a kid to be used as an object to take out all her angry. She, knowing everything, decided to have a kid with the first "Stupid" is an adjective. "Idiot" is a noun.
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Of course, How could a 4 years old child be able to fight two stupid shits? Of course, a 4 year old = someone who is 4 years old
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I'm sorry, I'm holding my tears, I want to cry. I'm sorry, I'm holding back my tears, I want to cry. |
I hate this question, I don't have a real family. |
I feel so alone. |
I don't know what is miss your mother, laugh with you father, I don't know how is that feeling. I don't know what i We only invert the word order when asking questions, not when creating subordinate clauses with interrogative pronouns.
What IS that feeling like? (question) I don't know what that feeling IS like. (statement) |
My mother is a better person now, my siblings are happy and in better conditions, they got the mother that I never had, and I'm happy for them. My mother is a better person now, my siblings are happy and living in better conditions "They got" is acceptable in some North American dialects, but is generally seen as too informal for writing.
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She is saving money now, she has goals, she is studying at university. |
I know that she regrets for all the things of the past. I know that she regrets |
She worries about me, supports me and doesn't pressure me. She "Worry" is fine but it implies that something bad is already happening, whereas "care" means she shows interest whether or not there is a crisis at foot.
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But she isn't my mom, I don't feel that. |
I see someone with blood ties that regrets and try to fix the things. I see someone with blood ties that feels regret "To regret" requires a direct object, so I've replaced it with "to feel regret" here. It could also be "that regrets everything", "that regrets certain things in the past", etc.
Tries to fix things would mean that she generally tries to fix different things, whereas trying to fix things means that she is currently working on fixing certain things. |
I can forgive many things but that doesn't repair anything. |
Have a mom isn't a blood tie or title, is a conecction, a feeling that cames from the inside. Hav |
And I don't have that feeling, I'm empty. |
When I read people saying "I miss my mom" "I love my mom", I just feel that empty space and I repeat to myself "How is that feeling? When I read people saying "I miss my mom" "I love my mom", I just feel that empty space and I repeat to myself " |
Is it warm? |
Does it gives you security or calm? |
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Believe me, I'm not the most sad and poor person of the world, but my childhood and adolescence was horrible. Believe me Generally we only use "poor" to mean unlucky in interjections: "oh you poor thing"! Here you could put most pitiful, most pathetic, unluckiest, or something like that.
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How much? How |
Am I exaggerating? |
I suffered insomnia because I was terrified thinking that maybe my alcoholic """FATHER""" could rape me when I was sleeping. |
Everyday was humiliations and threats. Everyday there was humiliation |
My mother tried to kick me out because I said, in a really calmed way "I don't think is okay force my sister to play something she doesn't want to". My mother tried to kick me out because I said, in a really calm |
I ran to the bathroom to help my brother, otherwise """HE""" will hit him because his stupid brain can't do anything withouth hit someone. I ran to the bathroom to help my brother, otherwise """HE""" w Use "would" because it's in the past.
without + verb triggers the gerund |
What does he said? What does he said? What did he say?
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"Dale las gracias a tu hermana porque sino ¡te habría sacado la mierda!". |
In English, something like "Thank your sister, otherwise I would taken the shit out of you! In English, something like "Thank your sister, otherwise I would have taken the shit out of you! In English we have a similar expression: "to beat the shit out of someone".
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"Sacado la mierda" is an expression to threat with hits. "Sacado la mierda" is an expression to threaten with Threat is a noun, threaten is a verb.
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"Crazy", "Without marks there's no pain", "I'll give you a real reason to cry". |
I can't forget those words. |
Fortunately I forget the most part of bad things. Fortunately I've forg |
Those stupid pieces of.... |
Seriously... |
I can't with this... I can't deal with this... To express exasperation in English we'd say something like "I can't deal with this", "I (just) can't handle this", "I can't go on like this".
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I'm sweating and holding my tears at the same time. I'm sweating and holding back my tears at the same time. To "hold" means to have in your hand.
To "hold back" means to stop from coming out. |
Even If my mother is a good person now, she can't erase anything of that shit of past that I had. Even |
So, I tried to change my family and I did it. |
That changed the life of my siblings. |
I'm trying to get over it, but is so hard. I'm trying to get over it, but it is so hard. |
At least now I can smile, I'm recovering from all of that. |
I'm working on it. |
So, a mother and two siblings. |
That's all. |
I guess I'll have many errors, I'm not gonna check it soon. I guess I'll have many errors, I'm not gonna check it |
When I was kid I obssesed with "perfection" because that's what my mother wanted, a sad and stupid "perfect daughter". |
She said to me many times, that I was the perfect child for her. She |
Even now I'm a bit obssessed with errors, mistakes and defects. |
I was so near to end with everything. I was so |
Well, my mother was near to end with me and my sister when my grandmother died. Well, my mother was |
I was 7 years old then. |
At the end there's only a sad person with mental problems and a deep hole inside her heart, holding all the memories and trying to fight. |
I'm not married, I don't want to have kids or pets. |
If I'm not fine I'll not bring a little and fragile life into this to suffer. |
Why do people have kids? |
"Because they will care you when you are old" "Because I want a mini me" "Because they are cute" "Because people say that" "Because my parents want grandchildren" "Because all my friend have one" "Because is the only way to be complete" "Because we born for that" "Because I didn't used protection and we don't have option" "Because they will take care of you when you are old" "Because I want a mini me" "Because they are cute" "Because people say that you should" "Because my parents want grandchildren" "Because all my friend have one" "Because it is the only way to be complete" "Because we were born for that" "Because I didn't use |
NO! |
I'm not gonna have kids for that simple reasons. I'm not gonna have kids for th "reasons" is in the plural
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I heard all these things from real parents and people who wants to have kids. I heard all these things from real parents and people who want people is plural so it would be "want", and also "heard" is in the past so want should also be in the past (wanted)
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But I say no. |
I'm not gonna create a new life just because I can or I want. I'm not gonna create a new life just because I can or I want to. |
If I have a kid, I'll sure to give the best: a nice family, a good enviroment, a brilliant future and above all a safe space, a good life. If I have a kid, I'll make sure to give them the best: a nice family, a good environment, a brilliant future and above all a safe space, a good life. "Give" requires an indirect object ("them").
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I'm gonna think "What could that little criature want and need?. I'm gonna think "What could that little cr |
A life is something so beautiful and fragile. |
I aprecciate it so much that I can't do it If I'm not enough, because I know how is to grow up in a terrible family. I apprec |
If I forgot a word or something, I'm sorry, I was feeling more than thinking. |
Although I'm not married, I have a boyfriend. |
He is the most important person in my life. |
We have problems sometimes as all the couples, but we progress. We have problems sometimes as do all Generic plural doesn't take the definite article in English. "All the couples" would mean a specific group of couples that both you and the reader know about: "all the couples here", "all the couples I mentioned", "all the couples in my life".
"but we're getting better" is another option for the second part. |
We learn with the time. We learn Time is a generic uncountable noun and doesn't take the definite article.
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He is the closest person for me, and I talk with him when I'm stressed and worried about something, specially If I'm remembering bad things or having nightmares. He is the special - unique
especially - particularly Or "he's the most important person in my life", "he's my closest friend", etc. |
Thanks for your time, I'll try to learn more about English. |
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