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Jack

Dec. 4, 2021

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Hi, my big brother, thank you very much for giving me that many corrections. I really appreciate them. Long time no chatting, how have you been? I still remember the first time that you talked with me in English, and I believe that is the first time that an American was willing to talk to me in English. I once joined your English writing group and you gave me a lot of corrections. That is also where my English writing started. Suddenly I remember a lot of things about you: you have been living in Hong Kong in the early 70 s, and you said even though your current health situation is not as good as before, you still live your life optimistically. "Fortunately, I am still alive". How optimistic a big brother you are! Although we don't talk with each other a lot, I still pay attention to all the English learning materials you have posted. As well, I have never stopped learning English, instead I even study harder. I have been considering you my role model and hope one day, I can still stay positive as you are when I am at your current age. In the end, let me thank you again. Thank you for all the help you have given me and I hope you and your family stay healthy and happy. Yours sincerely, younger brother, Jack.

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Hi, my big brother, thank you very much for giving me that many corrections.

Hi, my big brother, thank you veryso much for giving me that many corrections.

It's a little odd in English to write a reply to family like this "Hi, my big brother". Address your brother by their name instead.
Can write both "very" or "so", but very sounds more formal in this case.

Long time no chatting, how have you been?

Long time no chatting, how have you been?

Can also write long time no see (it's an idiom). You can say it without actually seeing someone with your eyes.

Suddenly I remember a lot of things about you: you have been living in Hong Kong in the early 70 s, and you said even though your current health situation is not as good as before, you still live your life optimistically.

Suddenly I remember a lot of things about you: you have been living in Hong Kong in the early 70 s, and you said that even though your current health situation is not as good as before, you still live your life optimistically.

As well, I have never stopped learning English, instead I even study harder.

As well, II also have never stopped learning English, instead I even study harder.

"Also" sounds more natural. If you prefer you can put "also" at the start of the sentence, but you will have to put a comma right after.

I have been considering you my role model and hope one day, I can still stay positive as you are when I am at your current age.

I have been considering you my role model and hope that one day, I can still stay positive as you are when I am at your current age.

Removing "are" makes it more natural.

Yours sincerely, younger brother, Jack.

Yours sincerely, younger brother, Jack.

Again, you don't have to say your relation to your brother.

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Trisha

Dec. 21, 2021

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PerfectRow object (145488)

Made a mistake, should be "70s" without a space.

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Jack

Dec. 21, 2021

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Thank you very much for correcting my journal and making such detailed explanations.

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Hi, my big brother, thank you very much for giving me that many corrections.

Hi, my big brother, thank you veryso much for giving me that many corrections.

I really appreciate them.

Long time no chatting, how have you been?

Long time no chatting, how have you been?

I still remember the first time that you talked with me in English, and I believe that is the first time that an American was willing to talk to me in English.

I once joined your English writing group and you gave me a lot of corrections.

That is also where my English writing started.

Suddenly I remember a lot of things about you: you have been living in Hong Kong in the early 70 s, and you said even though your current health situation is not as good as before, you still live your life optimistically.

Suddenly I remember a lot of things about you: you have been living in Hong Kong in the early 70 s, and you said that even though your current health situation is not as good as before, you still live your life optimistically.

"Fortunately, I am still alive".

How optimistic a big brother you are!

Although we don't talk with each other a lot, I still pay attention to all the English learning materials you have posted.

As well, I have never stopped learning English, instead I even study harder.

As well, II also have never stopped learning English, instead I even study harder.

I have been considering you my role model and hope one day, I can still stay positive as you are when I am at your current age.

I have been considering you my role model and hope that one day, I can still stay positive as you are when I am at your current age.

In the end, let me thank you again.

Thank you for all the help you have given me and I hope you and your family stay healthy and happy.

Yours sincerely, younger brother, Jack.

Yours sincerely, younger brother, Jack.

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