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Dec 04

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Hi, Lagan, let me tell you a story.

The evening before yesterday when I was going to pick my granddaughter up from kindergarten, I found I couldn’t start my car, so I had to call a taxi.

I thought the reason may be the battery because it happened several times that I couldn't start my car because the battery was running out of energy.

I had the battery changed, but I still couldn't start the engine. The mechanic didn't find anything wrong. After he did a computer test, afterwards he doubted if the car was running out of gasoline, so I added 230 rmb of gasoline, but it didn't work.

The mechanic said he couldn't figure out what the problem was at the moment. He told me he would fix my car at night when he was not busy.

Now I am at home. I don't know if they have already fixed my car or not. I forgot to ask for their phone numbers.

I will go to work tomorrow morning, and the car fixing store is right on my way to work. I think by then I will know.

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Hi, Lagan, let me tell you a story.

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The evening before yesterday when I was going to pick my granddaughter up from kindergarten, I found I couldn’t start my car, so I had to call a taxi.

I thought the reason may be the battery because it happened several times that I couldn't start my car because the battery was running out of energy.

I thought the reason may be the battery, because it has happened several times before that I couldn't start my car because the battery was running out of energy.

Corrected for colloquial style
Grammar

I thought the reason may be the battery because it happened several times that I couldn't start my carbefore because the battery was running out of energy.

Grammar Usage
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I had the battery changed, but I still couldn't start the engine.

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The mechanic didn't find anything wrong.

After he did a computer test, afterwards he doubted if the car was running out of gasoline, so I added 230 rmb of gasoline, but it didn't work.

After he did a computer test, afterwards he doubted if the car was runninghe thought the car might have ran out of gasoline, so I added 230 rmb of gasoline, but it didn't work.

Don't need to use afterwards after you use "after."

A little awkward to use "gasoline" twice in the same sentence, but completely fine for casual/colloquial speech. Same for "computer test" --- a little strange in written format, but fine for spoken.
Usage

After he did a computer test, afterwards he doubted ifhe thought that the car was running outlow ofn gasoline, so I added 230 rmb of gasoline, but ithat didn't work either.

Grammar Usage
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The mechanic said he couldn't figure out what the problem was at the moment.

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He told me he would fix my car at night when he was not busy.

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Now I am at home.

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I don't know if they have already fixed my car or not.

I don't know (whether|if) they have already fixed my car or not.

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I forgot to ask for their phone numbers.

I will go to work tomorrow morning, and the car fixing store is right on my way to work.

I will go to work tomorrow morning, and the car fixing storemechanic is right on my way to work.

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I will go to work tomorrow morning, and the car fixing storerepair shop is right on my way to work.

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I think by then I will know.

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