Sept. 22, 2021
048 Audience’s Fault
048 Audience’s Fault
Kevin played as a dad in the soap opera, The Manny. He suggested to the director and play writer that they make it in a serious way. However, the director didn't agree with him. The audience didn't like serious topics. They just wanted something funny and light. In one of the scenes, Kevin was quite pleased with his own performance. He showed his talent as a real actor. Although the director liked this scene, he knew this wouldn't work for the audience in front of TV. He demanded to take an alt. Kevin lost his temper and began to throw a tantrum. He smashed the fake baby on the ground. He opened the suitcase which was empty and smashed it. Everything was fake. He said it was not the directors fault, not the writer's fault, and not the network's fault. It was the audience’s fault to like this soap because they demand so little of the play.
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048 Audience’s Fault
048 Audience’s Fault
Kevin played as a dad in the soap opera, “The Manny”.
Kevin played as a dad in the soap opera “The Manny”.
He suggested to the director and play writer that they make it inadopt a serious waytone.
He suggested to the director and play writer that they adopt a serious tone.
"Make it in a serious way" = the behind-the-scenes production efforts are serious.
However, the director didn't agree with him.
The audience diwouldn't like serious topics.
The audience wouldn't like serious topics.
They just wanted something funny and light.
In one of the scenes, Kevin was quite pleased with his own performance.
In one of the scenes, Kevin was quite pleased with his performance.
He showed his talent as a realn actor.
He showed his talent as an actor.
Although the director liked this scene, he knew ithis wouldn't work for the TV audience in front of TV.
Although the director liked this scene, he knew it wouldn't work for the TV audience.
He demanded to take an althat they reshoot the scene.
He demanded that they reshoot the scene.
Kevin lost his temper and began to throw a tantrum.
He smashed thea fake baby on the ground.
He smashed a fake baby on the ground.
He opened thean empty suitcase which was empty and smashed it.
He opened an empty suitcase and smashed it.
Everything was fake.
He said it was not the directors fault, not the writer's fault, and not the network's fault.
It was the audience’s fault to like this soap, because they demanded so little of the playshow.
It was the audience’s fault, because they demanded so little of the show.
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Sept. 23, 2021
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048 Audience’s Fault This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Kevin played as a dad in the soap opera, The Manny.
Kevin played as a dad in the soap opera |
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He suggested to the director and play writer that they make it in a serious way.
He suggested to the director and play writer that they "Make it in a serious way" = the behind-the-scenes production efforts are serious. |
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However, the director didn't agree with him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The audience didn't like serious topics.
The audience |
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They just wanted something funny and light. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In one of the scenes, Kevin was quite pleased with his own performance.
In one of the scenes, Kevin was quite pleased with his |
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He showed his talent as a real actor.
He showed his talent as a |
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Although the director liked this scene, he knew this wouldn't work for the audience in front of TV.
Although the director liked this scene, he knew it |
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He demanded to take an alt.
He demanded t |
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Kevin lost his temper and began to throw a tantrum. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He smashed the fake baby on the ground.
He smashed |
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He opened the suitcase which was empty and smashed it.
He opened |
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Everything was fake. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He said it was not the directors fault, not the writer's fault, and not the network's fault. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was the audience’s fault to like this soap because they demand so little of the play.
It was the audience’s fault |
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