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041 Seething with Anger

michael_sun 8 · Sept. 14

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041 Seething with Anger
The prisoner knocked down the guard with a sharp blow on his face. He killed him and quickly changed into the dead man’s clothes. Dressed in a uniform and with a rifle over his shoulders, he walked boldly up and down in front of the camp. As a driver came to him, he knocked him on the ground. Jumping into the car, he soon drove off. Inside the camp, people were shouting and running here and there.
The next day, the incident appeared on the paper. There were mounting anger over this incident along with widespread condemnation. The president was seething with anger and lost his temper.


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nplearnsspanish 16 Sept. 15, 2021
041 Seething with Anger
041 Seething with Anger
The prisoner knocked down the guard with a sharp blow on his face.

The prisoner knocked down the guard with a sharp blow ton his face.

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He killed him and quickly changed into the dead man’s clothes.
Dressed in a uniform and with a rifle over his shoulders, he walked boldly up and down in front of the camp.

Dressed in a uniform and with a rifle over his shoulders, he boldly walked boldly up and downack and forth in front of the camp.

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You could also say "he boldly paced in front of the camp."
As a driver came to him, he knocked him on the ground.
Jumping into the car, he soon drove off.

Jumping into the car, he soonquickly drove off.

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Inside the camp, people were shouting and running here and there.
The next day, the incident appeared on the paper.

The next day, the incident appeared oin the paper.

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There were mounting anger over this incident along with widespread condemnation.

There wereas mounting anger over this incident along with widespread condemnation.

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The president was seething with anger and lost his temper.

Overall feedback & comment:

Nice! Very intense!
Comment added on 09/15/2021