Back from Vacation
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I stayed on the top of the mountain for a few days. At the top of the mountain, the air is fresh and there are very few tourists. The mountains were cool and comfortable, especially in the mornings and evenings. I'm back home after my vacation. Thinking about this heat that will last for more than another month is quite discouraging. Travel always makes me eat far more than I should, so I quickly gain weight. I don't like overweight, so I went to the gym as soon as I got home, and my weight was back to normal within two days. I'm always amazed at how quickly my weight goes up and down.
我在山顶上呆了几天。 山顶上空气清新，而且游客稀少。 山上凉爽舒适，尤其是在早晨和晚上。 假期结束后，我回到了家。 想到这股持续一个多月的酷热，实在令人沮丧。 旅行总让我吃得比平时多得多，所以体重迅速上升。 我不喜欢发胖，因此一回到家就去健身房锻炼，两天内体重就恢复了正常。 我总是惊讶于自己的体重变化之快。
Thinking about the fact that this heat that will last for more than another month is quite discouraging.
Or realizing that this heat will last.....
I don't like being overweight, so I went to the gym as soon as I got home, and my weight was back to normal within two days.
I stayed onat the top of the mountain for a few days.
Thinking about this heat that will last for more than anothera month is quite discouraging.
I don't like being overweight, so I went to the gym as soon as I got home, and my. My weight was back to normal within two days.
Splitting the sentence makes it easier to read.
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Really good work! There were only a few minor corrections here.
I stayed onat the top of the mountain for a few days.
At the top of the mountain, the air is fresh and there are very few tourists.
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Grammatical, but it would be more natural not to repeat "at the top of the mountain." For example, "The air is fresh up there and there are very few tourists".
I'm back home after my vacation.
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More natural to say "I'm back home now after my vacation " or "back home from my vacation".
Thinking about this heat that will last for more than another month is quite discouraging.
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It is quite discouraging to think that this heat will last another month.
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You want UK English (please note correctors!), so "vacation" > "holiday"
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