Sun Wukong-the Monkey King
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For Sun Wukong, the 81 trials on the journey to the West were not just battles against demons and monsters. More painfully, he endured misunderstangding from Tang Sanzang, who sometimes misjudged his protectiveacts as cruelty and punished him with the Golden Hoop Spell. Their main objective is to fetch the sacred scriptures in the West. If I had to switch places with Sun Wukong, I would first improve the skills of communication with Tang Sanzang and then learn to cooperate with the team and make full use of everyone's strengths.
对孙悟空来说，西天取经路上的八十一难，不只是与妖魔鬼怪战斗。 更困难的是，他要忍受唐三藏的误解——唐三藏有时会把他的保护看成残忍并且用紧箍咒惩罚他。 他们的核心目标是去往西天取得真经。 如果我不得不与孙悟空交换身份，我首先会提升与唐三藏的沟通技巧，然后学习团队合作并且充分发挥每个人的优点。
Sun Wukong-, the Monkey King
More painfully, he endured misunderstangdingmisunderstandings from Tang Sanzang, who sometimes misjudged his protectiveactsprotective acts as cruelty and punished him with the Golden Hoop Spell.
TheirHis main objective is to fetch the sacred scriptures in the West.
If I had to switch places with Sun Wukong, I would first improve the skills of communication with Tang Sanzang and then learn to cooperate with the team andto make full use of everyone's strengths.
Sun Wukong-, the Monkey King
I think it's a bit better with a comma here
For Sun Wukong, the 81 trials on the journey to the West were not just battles against demons and monsters.
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The structure is usually "not just X but Y". So this sentence needs an ending, eg. "...NOT JUST battles and against demons and monsters, BUT an internal battle with himself." OR "...BUT a challenge for his communication skills." Or something like that.
More painfully, he endured misunderstangdingmisunderstandings from Tang Sanzang, who sometimes misjudged his protectiveactsprotective acts as cruelty and punished him with the Golden Hoop Spell.
Sometimes implies more than once, so misunderstandingS
Their main objective is to fetch the sacred scriptures in the West.
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Whose main objective? If it's Sun Wukong, I would say either "His main objective..." or "Sun Wukong's main objective..."
If I had to switch places with Sun Wukong, I would first improve the skills of communication with Tang Sanzang and then learn to cooperate with the team and make full use of everyone's strengths.
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Interesting! Great writing :)
More painfully, he endured misunderstangding from Tang Sanzang, who sometimes misjudged his protectiveactsprotective acts as cruelty and punished him with the Golden Hoop Spell.
Likely a typo, need space
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