Failure is Necessary for Success
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Failure is an important part of learning process. However we sometimes have some diffuculties about facing our mistakes. I think it's too normal because no one likes making mistakes. But no one can achieve something without making mistakes. Many successful people failed before succeding. So, with accepting our failures and trying to adjust them , we can achieve a great development. In order to do this we shouldn't be afraid of making mistakes when we start a new journey. Knowing that our mistakes will help us develop, makes us more self-confident and courageous. In some sıtuations repeated failure can reduce our motivation to keep going. In such situations we should focus more on process rather than output. Most of the time winning people are not those who give up when faced an obstacle, winners are those who keep going.
Failure is an important part of the learning process.
However, we sometimes have some diffuculties aboutdifficulties facing our mistakes.
I think it's too normal because no one likes making mistakes.
So, with accepting our failures and trying to adjust them, we can achieve a great development.
In order to do this, we shouldn't be afraid of making mistakes when we start a new journey.
In such situations, we should focus more on the process rather than the output.
adding "the" gives more emphasis on the process and the output
Most of the time winningsuccessful people are not those who give up when faced with an obstacle, winners are but those who keep going.
"but" keeps the flow of the sentence better.
Overall feedback
This is a good topic and a good paragraph. Most of the corrections made are due to the nature of the text and its purpose to empower the reader, so the use of "the" is important but overall it is great. Keep it up. 9.5/10
- CcemreAug 6
Thanks a lot!
Failure is an important part of the learning process.
However we sometimes have some diffuculties about facing our mistakes.
I think it's too normal because no one likes making mistakes.
But no one can achieve somethinganything without making mistakes.
Many successful people failed before succedingsucceeding.
So, withby accepting our failures and trying to adjust them, we can achieve a great developmentdevelop ourselves.
Most of the time winning peoplewinners are not those who give up when facedfacing an obstacle, winners. Winners are those who keep going.
- CcemreAug 6
Thanks a lot!
Failure is an important part of learning / the learning process.
However, we sometimes have some diffuculties aboutdifficulty facing our mistakes.
some difficulty, for some reason difficulty being singular is more natural haha
So, with accepting our failures and trying to adjust them , we can achieve a great development.greater things/ we can develop ourselves more
Knowing that our mistakes will help us develop, it makes us more self-confident and courageous.
In some sıtuations, repeated failure can reduce our motivation to keep going.
small punctuation edits
In such situations we should focus more on the process rather than output.
Most of the time winning people are not those who give up when faced with an obstacle, winnersbut are those who keep going.
the "but" can add as a connector to make it smoother. "With" is grammatical
Overall feedback
Epictetus said: "If you want to improve, be content to be thought foolish and stupid with regard to external things."
- CcemreAug 6
That is definitely true. Thank you for quotation.
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