Cake
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I went to eat cake after work today. I wanted to eat Sachertorte (chocolate cake), but it was sold out. I ordered a "half and half cake set" that you can choose two half slices of cake and a drink coming with a small cup of soft serve ice cream. The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately ok. They weren't as good as I expected. I was eating and looking up information about two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation to cancel one of them. I like spending time like this!
ケーキ
仕事終わりにケーキを食べに行った。 ザッハトルテ（チョコレートケーキ）が食べたかったけど売り切れだった。 好きなハーフサイズのケーキ2つと飲み物に小さなソフトクリームが付く「ハーフ&ハーフケーキセット」を頼んだ。 ソフトクリームは美味しかったけど残念ながらケーキはまあまあだった。思っていたほど美味しくなかった。 食べながら、今度の旅行のために予約したホテル2つのうち1つをキャンセルするために情報を調べた。 こういった時間の過ごし方が好き！
The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately oknot so good.
I was eating and looking up information about two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation toso I could cancel one of them.
I ordered a "half and half” cake set" that lets you can choosepick two half slices of cake and comes with a drink coming withand a small cup of soft serve ice cream.
The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately just ok.
While I was eating and lookingI looked up information about two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation. I had to cancel one of them.
After work I went to eat cake after work todayfor afternoon tea.
This sounds strange to me. I would say, « After work I went for afternoon tea. »
I ordered a "half and half cake set" that you can choose. » It includes choice of two half slices of cake and, a drink coming withand a small cup of soft serve ice cream.
The ice cream was good, but the cakesslices of cake were unfortunatelyjust ok.
I was eating and looking up information about two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation. I cancelled/wanted to cancel one of them.
I ordered a "half and half cake setcombo" thatin which you can choose two half slices of cake and a drink coming with a small cup of soft serve ice cream.
The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately okmediocre.
I was eating and looking up information aboutreservations for two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation in order to cancel one of them.
I ordered a "half and half cake set" thatwhere you can choose two half slices of cake and a drink comingthat came with a small cup of soft serve ice cream.
The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately just ok.
"ok" by itself has a positive connotation by default. If you wanted to point out that you wanted to the cakes to be better than "ok", then "unfortunately just ok" is better as it makes it clear you expected better.
Thank you for your corrections!
I ordered a "half and half cake set" that lets you can choose two half slices of cake and a drink coming, and also comes with a small cup of soft serve ice cream.
The ice cream was good, but the cakes were unfortunately just ok.
Just saying "unfortunately ok" makes it sound like you wished they weren't okay and were bad instead. To make it clear that it was unfortunate because you wanted them to be more than okay, adding "just" is essential. As a side note, both "ok" and "okay" are fine, but my feeling is that "ok" is the more casual of the two, just so you're aware.
As I was eating and, I was looking up information about two hotels that I had booked for my summer vacation toso that I could cancel one of them.
What you wrote is grammatically correct, but it sounded a bit unnatural.
Thank you for your corrections!
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