Feb. 2, 2021
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should spend money on things that are long-lasting like expensive jewelry, rather than spending money on short-lived pleasures, like traveling.
Money plays a vital role in making various transactions and utilizing money for valuable things or trivial things depends on people's individual characteristics. Some people spend money on durable items, while others use it for transient happiness. Personally, I think people will benefit more if they spend money on short-term pleasures than long-lasting things. This is because short-lived pleasures enable people to create new memories and to enhance their relations.
First of all, I believe that some people will be happier when they allocate funds for their vacations. This means going on a vacation helps people to experience new things and develop memories related to it. Also, these experiences create cherishable moments which are invaluable. For instance, when I was working for a company Semantics, I received a bonus for my job and with that money my friends and me planned to Korg. This was a four-day trip, there we went to hiking in the woods, and spend time with the tribes in the region. Thus, the trip and enjoyment we had was the amazing thing. In contrast, if I purchased an item with the money I had, I would keep it in a locker. The item may be given me an assurance but not the happiness I received from my trip. Therefore, spending money for temporary pleasures will help in generating long-lasting memories.
Second of all, I think that expending money on short-term happiness reinforces the relationships. In other words, people when spend money on travelling or vacationing they have an opportunity to express themselves with their close ones. As a result, people will be more transparent which increases their bonding. For instance, in 2019 after marriage my husband and me went on the trip to New York. Even though the trip was for a week, it decreased the space between us. He was so caring and empathetic which I have not experienced before due to busy life and hectic schedules. This trip gave us more freedom and no room for misunderstandings. On the contrary, if we spend the money on buying a diamond ring may be the item value increases but not the value of our relationship.
In essence, I strongly believe that apportioning money for transient things benefit people more than spending money on making valuable purchases. This is because temporary pleasures enable people to develop amazing memories and enhance their relations. For these reasons, I agree with the statement.
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Money plays a vital role in making various transactions and utiliz. Using money for valuable things or trivial things depends on people's individual characteristics.
Money plays a vital role in various transactions. Using money for valuable things or trivial things depends on people's individual characteristics.
First of all, I believe that some people will be happier when they allocatesave up funds for their vacations.
First of all, I believe that some people will be happier when they save up funds for their vacations.
This means gGoing on a vacation helps people to experience new things and develop memories related to itto create memories.
Going on vacation helps people experience new things and to create memories.
For instance, when I was working for a company called Semantics, I received a bonus for my job and w. With that money, my friends and meI planned to visit Korg.
For instance, when I was working for a company called Semantics, I received a bonus for my job. With that money, my friends and I planned to visit Korg.
This was a four-day trip,; there, we went to hiking in the woods, and spendt time with the tribes in the region.
This was a four-day trip; there, we went hiking in the woods and spent time with the tribes in the region.
Thus, the trip and enjoyment we had was thon it were amazing things.
The trip and enjoyment we had on it were amazing things.
In contrast, if I had purchased an item with the money I had, I would have keept it in a locker.
In contrast, if I had purchased an item with the money, I would have kept it in a locker.
The item may bhave given me an assurance, but not the same happiness that I received from my trip.
The item may have given me assurance, but not the same happiness that I received from my trip.
Therefore, spending money for temporary pleasures willcan help in generating long-lasting memories.
Therefore, spending money for temporary pleasures can help in generating long-lasting memories.
Second of all, I think that exspending money on short-term happiness reinforces the relationships.
Second of all, I think that spending money on short-term happiness reinforces relationships.
In other words, people when spending money on travelling or vacationing they, people have an opportunity to express themselves with their close ones.
In other words, when spending money on travelling or vacationing, people have an opportunity to express themselves with their close ones.
For instance, in 2019 after my marriage, my husband and meI went on the trip to New York.
For instance, in 2019 after my marriage, my husband and I went on the trip to New York.
Even though the trip was only for a week, it decreased the space between usbrought us closer.
Even though the trip was only for a week, it brought us closer.
He was so caring and empathetic, which I haved not experienced before due to a busy life and hectic schedules.
He was so caring and empathetic, which I had not experienced before due to a busy life and hectic schedule.
This trip gave us more freedom and no room for misunderstandings.
This trip gave us freedom and no room for misunderstanding.
On the contrary, if we had spendt the money on buying a diamond ring may be, the item value might have increasesd but not the value of our relationship.
On the contrary, if we had spent the money on buying a diamond ring, the item value might have increased but not the value of our relationship.
In essence, I strongly believe that apportionspending money foron transient things benefit people more than spending money on making valuable purchases.
In essence, I strongly believe that spending money on transient things benefit people more than spending money on making valuable purchases.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? |
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People should spend money on things that are long-lasting like expensive jewelry, rather than spending money on short-lived pleasures, like traveling. |
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Money plays a vital role in making various transactions and utilizing money for valuable things or trivial things depends on people's individual characteristics.
Money plays a vital role in |
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Some people spend money on durable items, while others use it for transient happiness. |
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Personally, I think people will benefit more if they spend money on short-term pleasures than long-lasting things. |
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This is because short-lived pleasures enable people to create new memories and to enhance their relations. |
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First of all, I believe that some people will be happier when they allocate funds for their vacations.
First of all, I believe that some people will be happier when they |
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This means going on a vacation helps people to experience new things and develop memories related to it.
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Also, these experiences create cherishable moments which are invaluable. |
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For instance, when I was working for a company Semantics, I received a bonus for my job and with that money my friends and me planned to Korg.
For instance, when I was working for a company called Semantics, I received a bonus for my job |
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This was a four-day trip, there we went to hiking in the woods, and spend time with the tribes in the region.
This was a four-day trip |
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Thus, the trip and enjoyment we had was the amazing thing.
Th |
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In contrast, if I purchased an item with the money I had, I would keep it in a locker.
In contrast, if I had purchased an item with the money |
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The item may be given me an assurance but not the happiness I received from my trip.
The item may |
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Therefore, spending money for temporary pleasures will help in generating long-lasting memories.
Therefore, spending money for temporary pleasures |
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Second of all, I think that expending money on short-term happiness reinforces the relationships.
Second of all, I think that |
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In other words, people when spend money on travelling or vacationing they have an opportunity to express themselves with their close ones.
In other words, |
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As a result, people will be more transparent which increases their bonding. |
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For instance, in 2019 after marriage my husband and me went on the trip to New York.
For instance, in 2019 after my marriage, my husband and |
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Even though the trip was for a week, it decreased the space between us.
Even though the trip was only for a week, it |
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He was so caring and empathetic which I have not experienced before due to busy life and hectic schedules.
He was so caring and empathetic, which I ha |
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This trip gave us more freedom and no room for misunderstandings.
This trip gave us |
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On the contrary, if we spend the money on buying a diamond ring may be the item value increases but not the value of our relationship.
On the contrary, if we had spen |
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In essence, I strongly believe that apportioning money for transient things benefit people more than spending money on making valuable purchases.
In essence, I strongly believe that |
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This is because temporary pleasures enable people to develop amazing memories and enhance their relations. |
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For these reasons, I agree with the statement. |
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