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toshinou_kyouko

April 27, 2024

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My name is Ada. I'm a dog.

I slept under my parent's bed because it's dark there and I like spending time there. Now is about 7 in the morning and it's a perfect time to start my day! Usually, I go to my crate and touch my bowl with my paw so that it makes some sound and my parents wake up to feed me. I had to wait an entire hour until they finally wake up! My mom is coming to me and I'm super excited! But now I also see my sister, who was sleeping with my parent in the bed, coming to her own crate which is right next to mine.I don't like it! She might steal my food! I bark to tell her not to come here but she doesn't listen to me! Moreover, my mom is not happy about my behaviour and she says "shh" to calm me down. There's nothing I could do and my sister goes to her crate. Now it's finally time to eat! The food is very tasty and I ate it very quickly. I like to eat!
After breakfast we went outside. We went to our car and dad drove us to the dog's forest. I like this place! I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there're another dogs I can say hi to. I walked around and I sniffed a lot of interesting smells. Then, we met a lost dog and my mom had to help him to find his parents. He was very annoying and kept his nose near my butt.
Then we came home and I was happily sleeping the most of the day under the bed.

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My name is Ada. I'm a dog.

I slept under my parent's bed because it's dark there and I like spending time there.

Now it is about 7 in the morning and it's a perfect time to start my day!

Usually, I go to my crate and touch my bowl with my paw so that it makes some sound and my parents wake up to feed me.

I had to wait an entire hour until they finally waoke up!

My mom is coming to me and I'm super excited!

But now I also see my sister, who was sleeping with my parent in the bed, coming to her own crate which is right next to mine.I don't like it!

She might steal my food!

I bark to tell her not to come here but she doesn't listen to me!

Moreover, my mom is not happy about my behaviour and she says "shh" to calm me down.

There's nothing I could do and my sister goes to her crate.

Now it's finally time to eat!

The food iwas very tasty and I ate it very quickly.

Keep your tenses consistent!

I like to eat!

After breakfast we went outside.

We went to our car and dad drove us to the dog's forest.

I like this place!

I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there' are another dogs I can say hi to.

I walked around and I sniffmelled a lot of interesting smells.

Then, we met a lost dog and my mom had to help him to find his parents.

He was very annoying and kept his nose near my butt.

Then we came home and I was happily sleeping thept most of the day under the bed.

We came home is past, so sleeping should be too

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toshinou_kyouko

April 28, 2024

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Thank you!

I had to wait an entire hour until they finally waoke up!

We went to our car and dad drove us to the dog's forest.

Is Dog's Forest the name of a park? Or did you mean dog park?

I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there' are another dogs I can say hi to.

I walked around and I sniffmelled a lot of interesting smellodors.

Then we came home and I was happily sleeping the most of the dayspent most of the day happily sleeping under the bed.

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This was really cute :)

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toshinou_kyouko

April 28, 2024

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Dog's Forest is an actual place's name. Thanks!

I bark to tell her not to come here but she doesn't listen to me!

Moreover, my mom is not happy about my behaviour and she says "shh" to calm me down.

There's nothing I could do and my sister goes to her crate.

Now it's finally time to eat!

The food is very tasty and I ate it very quickly.

The food iwas very tasty and I ate it very quickly.

My name is Ada. I'm a dog.

I slept under my parent's bed because it's dark there and I like spending time there.

Now is about 7 in the morning and it's a perfect time to start my day!

Now it is about 7 in the morning and it's a perfect time to start my day!

Usually, I go to my crate and touch my bowl with my paw so that it makes some sound and my parents wake up to feed me.

I had to wait an entire hour until they finally wake up!

I had to wait an entire hour until they finally waoke up!

I had to wait an entire hour until they finally waoke up!

My mom is coming to me and I'm super excited!

But now I also see my sister, who was sleeping with my parent in the bed, coming to her own crate which is right next to mine.I don't like it!

She might steal my food!

I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there're another dogs I can say hi to.

I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there' are another dogs I can say hi to.

I don't have to be on a leash here and sometimes there' are another dogs I can say hi to.

I walked around and I sniffed a lot of interesting smells.

I walked around and I sniffmelled a lot of interesting smellodors.

I walked around and I sniffmelled a lot of interesting smells.

Then, we met a lost dog and my mom had to help him to find his parents.

He was very annoying and kept his nose near my butt.

Then we came home and I was happily sleeping the most of the day under the bed.

Then we came home and I was happily sleeping the most of the dayspent most of the day happily sleeping under the bed.

Then we came home and I was happily sleeping thept most of the day under the bed.

I like to eat!

After breakfast we went outside.

We went to our car and dad drove us to the dog's forest.

We went to our car and dad drove us to the dog's forest.

I like this place!

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