My first day of school
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Yesterday, I had my first day of school. I think it's an important moment because it kind of deffines how your school year will be, and so how your year will be because school is the place you spend the most time in your childhood. There are 3 main things you discover at your first day of school: your class, your schedule and your teachers. The first one is your class, meaning the people with who you'll spend the year. Normally, you would discover the names of those people the very day of your first day of school but I knew them the previous day thanks to a friend who got access to the list. In term of class, I wasn't super happy, because my best friends aren't in the same class than me, but I was satisfied because I still had people I knew and appreciated. Knowing your class before you come back at school makes it less stressful.
With friends we decided to organise a hang out before the first day of school so we could spend time together and go there. A lot of my friends didn't know the people in their class so I was one of the rare to know. I am actually so jealous of my friends because most of them are gathered in the same class (there are like 3 of my best friends and 3 other good friends) but when I think back to another one who is almost alone with only 1 good friend, I realise it's not that bad lol. Also I am happy because this year is super important for my future as it defines which college I will integrate next year and I'm glad I'm in the same class than a motivated friend. I think we both can push the other upward and get the best grades possible.
The second part is the schedule as I said. The first time I saw it I was kind of disappointed because it was way less good than the one I had last year but the main reason is the option "Maths expertes" that adds up 3 hours a week. Also when I saw my friends' schedule I realise mine is actually one of the best of my high school so I'm quite happy with that.
The last part is the teachers but I don't have much to say because I don't know most of them. The only one I know is my English teacher who really liked me so it's a good luck for me to have her particularly because I almost always got very good grades at her tests.
To conclude my first day of school went pretty well though it could have been better but I think I have the good conditions to lock in during the year in order to get the best grades possibles.
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I think it's an important moment because it kind of deffinesdefines how your school year will be, and sotherfore how your year will be, because school is the place where you spend the most of your time induring your childhood.
There are 3 main things you discover aton your first day of school: your class, your schedule and your teachers.
The first one is your class, meaning the people with who you'll spend the year with.
Normally, you would discover the names of those people the very day ofon your first day of school, but I knew them the previous day thanks to a friend who gothad access to the list.
In term of my class, I wasn't super happy, because my best friends aren't in the same class thanas me, but I was satisfied because I still had people I knew and appreciated.
Knowing your class before you comego back atto school makes it less stressful.
WithMy friends weand I decided to organise a hang outhangout before the first day of school so we could spend time together and go there together.
A lot of my friends didn't know the people in their classclasses, so I was one of the rare to knowfew who knew.
I am actually so jealous of my friends because most of them are gatheredtogether in the same class (there are like 3 of my best friends and 3 other good friends) but when I think back toabout another onefriend who is almost alone with only 1 good friend, I realise it's not that bad lol.
Also I am happy because this year is super important for my future as it defines which college I will integrateattend next year and I'm glad I'm in the same class thanas a motivated friend.
I think we both can push theeach other upwardto do better and get the best grades possible.
The first time I saw it I was kind of disappointed because it was way less goodmuch worse than the one I had last year but the main reason is the option "Maths expertes" thatwhich adds up 3 hours a week.
Also when I saw my friends' scheduleschedules I realiserealised mine is actually one of the best ofin my high school, so I'm quite happy with that.
The only one I know is my English teacher who really liked me so it's a good luck for meI am lucky to have her, particularly because I almost always got very good grades aton her tests.
To conclude my first day of school went pretty well. though it It could have been better, but I think I have the goodright conditions to lock in during the year in order to get the best grades possiblespossible.
Overall feedback
Your English is already quite expressive for B1. You can explain your feelings and tell a story in detail. The main things to work on are prepositions, comparisons (“same…as”), and natural English expressions. Good job! 😊
lol thx actually I'm not B1, I am B2+
I think it's an important moment because it kind of deffinesdefines how your school year will be, and so how your year will be because school is the place you spend the most time in your childhood.
Kind of does not apply in this type of sentence. Defines is only one F Duplication of 'how your school year will be, and so how your year will be' - these two sentences essentially say the same thing.
There are 3 main things you discover aton your first day of school: your class, your schedule and your teachers.
'On' feels more natural in this sentence - you are discovering three things ON your first day Not AT your first day
The first one is your class, meaning the people with who you'll spend the rest of the year.
Normally, you would only discover the names of those peopleyour classmates on the very day of your first day of school, but I knew themwho my classmates were the previous day before, thanks to a friend who got access to the class list.
In term of class, I wasn't super happy, because my best friends aren'tweren't in the same class than me, but I was satisfied becauseenough as I still had people who I knew and appreciatedliked.
With friends we decided to organise a hang out before the first day of school so we could spend time together andbefore we go there.
A lot of my friends didn't know the people in their class so I was one of the rare people to know beforehand.
I am actually so jealous of my friends because most of them are gathered in the same class (therethey are like 3 of my best friends and 3 other good friends) but when I think back to another one of my other friends, who is almost totally alone with only 1 good friend, I realise it's not that bad lol.
Good use of lol!
Also I am happy because this year is super important for my future, as it defines which college I will integrateattend next year. and I'm also very glad I'm in the same class than awith my motivated friend.
Sentence was too long.
I think we both can push theeach other upwardto work hard and get the best grades possible.
The second partthing you discover on your first day at school is theyour schedule as I said.
It's been too long writing without referencing back to what you were originally talking about.
The first time I saw itmy schedule, I was kind of disappointed because it was way less good than the one I had last year. but the main The reason it is wasn't as good as last year is mainly because of the option "Maths expertes", that which adds up 3 hours a week.
AlsoHowever, when I saw my friends' schedule, I realiserealised that mine is actually one of the best of my high school! so So I'm quite happy with that.
TheFinally, your last partdiscovery is the teachers, but truthfully, I don't have much to say becauseas I don't know most of them.
The only one I know is my English teacher, who really likedlikes me, so it's a good luck for me toI'm lucky have her. particularly Particularly because I almost always gotget very good grades at her tests.
To conclude, my first day of school went pretty well (even though it could have been better!) but I think I have the good conditions to lock in during the upcoming year in order to get the best grades possiblespossible.
Overall feedback
Very good!! Couple of small changes here and there for sentence structure and to add some personability with grammar (exclamation points, brackets etc). Really good work though, I really enjoyed your correct use of 'lol' in a funny/sarcastic way, and the uses of 'totally'.
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This was super good! You're english is fantastic! Keep practicing. The biggest recommendation I have give is to break up the sentences more. Instead of adding another because, add a period and start a new sentence. This makes things flow nicely and fluently.
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