As We Drove to H’s House
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Now we were on our way to H's house. My two daughters sat in the back seat as the car quietly pulled away. Fifteen years earlier, she had driven me along this very road, yet I could remember almost nothing of the scenery. The landscape was peaceful, with hardly anyone to be seen walking outside.
Even so, as I watched the countryside roll by, faint memories gradually began to return. I remember this place. Didn't we pass a church around here? Little by little, fragments of the past came back to me.
※We visited a samll village in Czeschia in February this year.
さあ、これからハナさんの家へ向かう。後部座席には娘たち二人が座り、車は静かに走り出した。十五年前も同じように彼女の車に乗せてもらい、この道を走ったはずなのに、景色はほとんど覚えていない。のどかな風景だ。あまり人も歩いていない。 それでも、「ここは見覚えがある」「この教会の前を通った気がする」と、街並みを眺めるうちに、かすかな記憶が少しずつ戻ってきた。
Now we wereare on our way to H's house.
Fifteen years earlier, she had drivendrove me along this very road, yet I could remember almost nothing of the scenery.
Thank you！
My two daughters sat in the back seat as the carwe began to quietly pulleddrive away.
While a car pulling away can mean that it has started to move, it's usually from the perspective of someone who is not inside the car looking at that car pulling away. Granted, in the Japanese, the topic is the 車, so the original isn't really inaccurate.
The landscape was peaceful, with hardly anyone to be seen walking outside.
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Very nicely written! The following is less of a correction and more of a stylistic suggestion that is very steeped in how I personally would phrase things. "Fifteen years earlier, she had driven me along this very same road, yet I could remember almost nothing of the scenery back then. Now, the landscape was peaceful, with hardly anyone walking outside nor was there anything else for my mind to anchor itself to. Even so..." As you can tell, it is much wordier as I do tend to overwrite, so I would take this with a lot of salt because I do like your usual way of writing anyway.
Thank you for your corrections and advice.
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