Sci-Fi Short Story: Part 4
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Loredana Tanveer caught herself couldn't keep her eyes off the sleeping baby girls for the past ten minutes. The sturdy mountain house near Massiola was warm and cozy, despite the snowstorm that was starting outside. The wind grew stronger. It howled in the chimney, stubbornly tried to frighten, and even threw handfuls of wet snow at the closed shutters. But Loredana wasn't afraid— for recreation in the foothills of the Italian Alps, a personae-mask, called survivor, had been specially designed for her, which offered a wide range of knowledge, from building a fire in a winter forest to deer hunting and providing professional medical care. The sleeping girls were mesmerizing, and she still couldn't believe that they were hers, flesh and blood, so independent, sweet, vulnerable, and unknown. Wrapped in a huge bearskin, the twins slept by the fireplace, where a sizable log burned meditatively. They were pretty tired today, all three of them, and Loredana was in no hurry to carry her daughters into the bedroom. The little girls' birthday had been wonderful – with a long ride on a robotic sled, a gallon of hot cocoa, sledding, sculpting, and a whole gallery of "snow angels" in the courtyard of their rented cottage. Birthday... already their fourth, although it seemed to Lore as if she had left the maternity ward of the family clinic only yesterday. How quickly the time flew by! Exactly one year has passed since the ‘root personae’ were constructed for the twins Zsofia and Paola, which have already managed to merge with their natural personalities. The life experience, systematized by their shells over a dozen months, was very bright, carefree, and naïve . Now, over the sisters' ‘personae’, rested the simple half-masks of dream generators, making the children smile carefreely and tremble, like puppies, their legs. Loredana sighed sadly. She remembered her first conversations with her parents. Their indignation... incredibly cynical, considering how old her mother was when she gave birth... "Lore, come to your senses, you're only sixty-nine, you're still just a girl!" ...their failure to understand... "We really want heirs, but not from a soulless DNA constructor!" ...their worries and sadness... which were predictably replaced by love... "These are the most wonderful little ones in all Three Houses!" ...and support... "Sunny, you'll become the best mother in the system!"
Лоредана Танвир поймала себя на том, что уже десять минут не может оторвать взгляда от спящих малышек. В крепком горном доме неподалеку от Массиолы было тепло и уютно, несмотря на начинающуюся снаружи метель. Ветер усиливался, подвывал в дымоходе, силился напугать, и даже бросался в закрытые ставни горстями мокрого снега. Но Лора не испытывала страха - специально для отдыха в предгорьях италийских Альп ей разработали персону, обладающую самым широким спектром знаний, от разведения костра в зимнем лесу до охоты на оленей и оказания профессиональной медицинской помощи. Спящие девочки завораживали, и она все еще не могла поверить, что это - ее, плоть от плоти, такое самостоятельное, милое, ранимое и неизведанное. Закутавшись в огромную медвежью шкуру, близнецы спали у камина, где медитативно прогорало внушительное полено. Сегодня они изрядно утомились, причем все трое, и Лоредана не спешила переносить дочерей в спальню. День рождения малышек прошел чудесно - с долгой прогулкой на робосанях, галлоном горячего какао, катанием с горок, лепкой фигур и целой галереей «снежных ангелов» во дворе арендованного коттеджа. День рождения… уже четвертый, хотя Лоре казалось, что родильное отделение семейной клиники она покинула только вчера. Ровно год минул с тех пор, как для близняшек Жофии и Паоле сконструировали корневые персоны, которые уже успели срастись с их природными личностями. Опыт, систематизированный оболочками за дюжину месяцев, еще был нарочито светел, беззаботен и наивен. Сейчас поверх сестринских персон покоились простенькие полумаски сновидческих генераторов, заставляющие детей беспечно улыбаться и мелко, как щеночки, подрагивать ногами. Девушка грустно вздохнула. Она вспомнила первые разговоры с родителями. Их негодование… донельзя циничное, если задуматься, в каком возрасте мать родила ее саму… - Лора, одумайся, тебе всего шестьдесят девять, ты еще совсем девочка! …их недопонимание… - Мы очень хотим наследников, но не от бездушного конструктора ДНК! …их тревоги и печаль… На смену которым ожидаемо пришли любовь… - Это самые чудесные малышки во всех Трех Домах! …и поддержка… - Солнышко, ты станешь лучшей матерью системы!
Loredana Tanveer caught herself couldn't keephadn't taken her eyes off the sleeping baby girls for the past ten minutes.
It howled in the chimney, stubbornly triedtrying to frighten, and even threw handfuls of wet snow at the closed shutters.
Wrapped in a huge bearskin, the twins slept by the fireplace, where a sizable log burned meditatively.
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I wouldn't say a log burned meditatively. Maybe slowly? It's just not a word I usually associate with burning logs.
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'Carefreely' isn't a word, though I commend your creativity.
their legs.
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Cool story! Seems a bit dystopian, with the 'personae.' Can't wait to see more!
Thank you very much for your help! I'm glad you liked it.
Loredana Tanveer caught herself couldn't keep her eyes off the sleeping baby girls for the past ten minutes.
To catch oneself doing something = needs to be followed by a verb ending in “ing” So you could say “she caught herself watching the sleeping girls”
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Lilja, thank you very much for your help!
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