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SummerTeaWater

April 14, 2022

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Vitabin D

Every day I take vitamin D for my health.

It's because I can't see the sun very often because I only work in the office.

When I don't take vitamin D, I feel more tired.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun often.

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Every day I take vitamin D for my health.

It'The reason I take it is because I can't see the sun very often becausedue to the fact that I only work in the office.

You can also combine this sentence with the previous one:

Every day I take vitamin D for my health because I can't see the sun very often due to the fact that I only work in the office.

When I don't take vitamin D, I feel more tired.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

Or you could also say:

1. Rather than staying inside all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

2. Rather than working all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

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Take care of your health! Good job! :)

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SummerTeaWater

April 15, 2022

402

Thank you very much :)

Vitabmin D

Every day I take vitamin D for my health.

It's because I can't seebe in the sun very often because I onlyas I work in thean office.

When I don't take vitamin D, I feel more tired.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

Rather than staying at windoorks all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

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Very good writing, I hope you get to see the sun more ☀️

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SummerTeaWater

April 15, 2022

402

Thank you very much. :)

Vitabmin D

Every day I take vitamin D for my health.

It' do this because I can't see the sun very often because I only work in thean office.

When I don't take vitamin D, I feel more tired.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

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SummerTeaWater

April 15, 2022

402

Thank you so much.

Vitabmin D

Every day, I take vitamin D for my health.

It's because I can't see the sun very often because I only, since I always work in thean office.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

Rather than staying indoors at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

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SummerTeaWater

April 15, 2022

402

Thank you so much.

Every day I take vitamin D for my health every day.

The sentence that you wrote is correct and would be understood, but it sounds more natural if you first say the subject; what the subject did; what the subject is performing the action on and then anything that explains why the action was performed in the first place.

It's because I can't seebe in the sun very often because I only work in the office.

It is better in this situation to remove "It's because" due to the fact that there is no clear idea of what "it" is. Your sentence is understandable because we can read back to the previous sentence (and use the existing context) to understand that the "it" is vitamin D; however, for this sentence to make the most sense and stand on its own, "It's because" should be removed.
Vitamin D is not something you can get from simply seeing sunlight, you need to be in sunlight to get it so switching "see the sun" to "be in the sun" makes more sense in this context.
Saying that you "only work in the office" is slightly unnatural in this case because we are not discussing your working habits, we are just discussing why you are not spending time in the sun. Simply, you are not in the sun because you are in the office.
Overall, it is very unusual to say "because" twice in the same sentence.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.
I can't concentrate on my work either.

While not incorrect in my opinion, it is a little redundant to use both "even" and "either" in the same sentence in this case. You should either use one or the other.
"I can't even concentrate on my work." or "I can't concentrate on my work either."

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

This sentence comes across as meaning you want to see the sun more than you already do, so I'd just suggesting adding the word more.
In this situation, saying you want "to see" the sun more often makes sense.

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Overall I think you are doing a really good job of writing in English! While the sentences are occasionally constructed unusually, I had no difficulty understanding what you were saying and only minor changes were needed.

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SummerTeaWater

April 17, 2022

402

Thank you very much :)

Vitabin D

Vitabmin D

Vitabmin D

Vitabmin D

Every day I take vitamin D for my health.

Every day, I take vitamin D for my health.

Every day I take vitamin D for my health every day.

It's because I can't see the sun very often because I only work in the office.

It'The reason I take it is because I can't see the sun very often becausedue to the fact that I only work in the office.

It's because I can't see the sun very often because I only, since I always work in thean office.

It's because I can't seebe in the sun very often because I onlyas I work in thean office.

It' do this because I can't see the sun very often because I only work in thean office.

It's because I can't seebe in the sun very often because I only work in the office.

When I don't take vitamin D, I feel more tired.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.

I can't even concentrate on my work, either.
I can't concentrate on my work either.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun often.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

Rather than staying indoors at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

Rather than staying at windoorks all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

Rather than staying at work all the time, I want to see the sun more often.

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