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habbl

July 20, 2022

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Too hot to move

I think the heat affects my motivation to get anything done. That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursed during summer vacation. Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated of wasting my youth and lifetime, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.
I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.
I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out. After all, that's what I learned as a child:
"The sun is shining so go and play outside."
Once I embraced the waste of a sunny day by staying inside (with a ventilation system and a cool towel), I could enjoy the summer. And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streest of my village on a hot summer night.


- Can I say "ventilator" in english?
- oh god, where do the commas go?!
- "'A' isn't true, for 'B'" --> does this structure exist?

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Too hot to move

I think the heat affects my motivation to get anything done.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursedmessed up during summer vacation.

This sounds more natural in the US but I do like the way you phrased it. "Cursed" indeed!

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated ofwith feeling like I'm wasting my youth and lifetimand my life, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

This sounds more natural in the US.

And, yes, I, too, hate it when this happens.

I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

After all, that's what I learned as a child:

"The sun is shining so go and play outside.

"

Once I embraced the waste of a sunny day by staying inside (with a ventilation system and a cool towel), I could enjoy the summer.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

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You have a beautiful way of using English! I enjoyed reading this. Terrific job!

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habbl

July 29, 2022

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Thank you so much! Lovely to hear that!

Too hot to move

I think the heat affects my motivation to get anything done.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern ishabits are just cursed during summer vacation.

Your sentence is correct but "sleeping habits" sounds better to me.

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated of wasting my youth and lifetime, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

After all, that's what I learned as a child:

"The sun is shining so go and play outside.

"

Once I embraced the waste of a sunny day by staying inside (with a ventilation system and a cool towel), I could enjoy the summer.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

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This piece is well written. It is poetic at the end!

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursed during summer vacation.

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated by the thought of wasting my youth and lifetime, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, forbecause I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

Too hot to move

I think the heat affects my motivation to get anything done.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursed during summer vacation.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern ishabits are just cursed during summer vacation.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursedmessed up during summer vacation.

That's the reason why my sleeping pattern is just cursed during summer vacation.

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated of wasting my youth and lifetime, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated ofwith feeling like I'm wasting my youth and lifetimand my life, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

Sometimes I just lie in bed all day, frustrated by the thought of wasting my youth and lifetime, just to find myself full of energy as soon as the sun goes down.

I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.

I managed to fix this problem and to get myself out of bed eventually.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

I think the thing that frustrated me the most, was that I expected of myself to go out.

After all, that's what I learned as a child:

"The sun is shining so go and play outside.

"

Once I embraced the waste of a sunny day by staying inside (with a ventilation system and a cool towel), I could enjoy the summer.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streest of my village on a hot summer night.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, for I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

And even though I may miss out on a great amount of sunshine, the sun's hard work doesn't go to waste, forbecause I love to walk the streests of my village on a hot summer night.

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