July 27, 2020
Today's Weather!
Today it was quite hot. When the weather is too hot, I cannot stay in my room. So, I go outside for a walk. if it rains, I am usually happy because I can stay in my room and study. I am not against hot weather, it is just that I cannot study when it is hot.
Today's Weather!
Today it was quite hot.
When the weather igets too hot, I cannot stay in my room.
So, I gowent outside for a walk.
Since you mentioned was quite hot, I changed this to past tense
if it rains, I am usually happy because I can stay in my room and study.
I am not against hot weather, ibut it's just that I cannot study when it igets hot.
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Nice work :)
July 28, 2020
Thanks a lot for your help!
Today's Weather!
Today, it was quite hot.
You generally need a comma when adverbial phrases are at the beginning of a sentence.
When the weather is too hot, I cannot stay in my room.
SoBecause of that, I go outside for a walk.
"So" is fine verbally, but in writing, it makes the sentence sound incomplete. Some people wouldn't use "because" at the beginning of a sentence, but to me it's fine as long as it doesn't result in a sentence fragment.
Personally, I might use "will" before "go," but I think it is fine as is.
ifWhen it rains, I am usually happy because I can stay in my room and study.
"If it rains" would be understood, but "when" makes more sense to me.
I am not against hot weather,; it is just that I cannot study when it is hot.
The two clauses are complete in themselves, so punctuation to designate that or a conjunction is needed. There are certain times when it is stylistically appropriate to omit conjunctions and use commas, but generally, those fall into one of these categories:
- Have more than two items
- Itemized phrase is relatively short.
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Great! As spoken English, this would have been fine. My corrections were more to do with writing conventions.
July 28, 2020
Thanks a lot! it reminded me of some of the grammatical rules that I had forgotten. Many thanks!
Today's Weather!
Today iIt was quite hot today.
sounds more natural
When the weather is too hot, I canno't stay in my room, so I go outside for a walk.
So, I go outside for a walk.
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Good entry! Your English is pretty good. I basically tried to make the entry sound more natural. For example, "cannot" --> "can't" is better in conversational English. "cannot" is more formal and puts more emphasis on the word. I also joined one of your sentences to make it not sound awkward.
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Today it was quite hot.
sounds more natural
Today, it was quite hot. You generally need a comma when adverbial phrases are at the beginning of a sentence.
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When the weather is too hot, I cannot stay in my room. When the weather is too hot, I can When the weather |
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So, I go outside for a walk.
"So" is fine verbally, but in writing, it makes the sentence sound incomplete. Some people wouldn't use "because" at the beginning of a sentence, but to me it's fine as long as it doesn't result in a sentence fragment.
Personally, I might use "will" before "go," but I think it is fine as is. So, I Since you mentioned was quite hot, I changed this to past tense
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if it rains, I am usually happy because I can stay in my room and study.
"If it rains" would be understood, but "when" makes more sense to me.
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I am not against hot weather, it is just that I cannot study when it is hot. I am not against hot weather The two clauses are complete in themselves, so punctuation to designate that or a conjunction is needed. There are certain times when it is stylistically appropriate to omit conjunctions and use commas, but generally, those fall into one of these categories:
- Have more than two items - Itemized phrase is relatively short. I am not against hot weather, |
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