May 19, 2020
THINGS I WANT TO GET BETTER AT
I have started to DJ last year, and practiced. It is true that I'm getting better than before, however I think that I have to play better. Because I had a opportunity to DJ last year, because of my friends of DJ. I was confident that I was able to DJ well, however I was so nervous, because it was the first time to DJ for me in front of a lot of people. I could not do my best, and I made many mistakes. From then, I thought that I have to get better my DJ skill. For success at next time, I want to improve my skill.
THINGS I WANT TO GET BETTER AT
I have started to DJ last year, and I've practiced a lot since then.
The second clause is grammatically correct but sounds a bit incomplete. The corrections just add more context for the sentence.
It is true that I'm getting better than before, however I think that I have to play better.
Because I had a opportunity to DJ last year, because of my friends of DJ.
I was confident that I was able to DJ well, howeverbut I was so nervous, because it was the first time to DJ for meDJing in front of a lot of people.
"DJing" is a more conversational term
I could not do my best, and I made many mistakes.
From then on, I thoughtknew that I haved to get betterimprove my DJ skills.
"I thought" doesn't quite sound right in this context. People generally use "I thought" when they were wrong about something, i.e. "I thought that you had a sister." The previous sentence implies that the person does not have a sister.
"Improve" is a more concise way to say "get better".
ForTo success ated next time, I want to improve my skills.
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Good job on your text and good luck with your DJ practice!
May 26, 2020
Thank you for your correcting!!
It's easy for me to understand your explanation.
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THINGS I WANT TO GET BETTER AT |
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I have started to DJ last year, and practiced. I The second clause is grammatically correct but sounds a bit incomplete. The corrections just add more context for the sentence.
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It is true that I'm getting better than before, however I think that I have to play better. |
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Because I had a opportunity to DJ last year, because of my friends of DJ.
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I was confident that I was able to DJ well, however I was so nervous, because it was the first time to DJ for me in front of a lot of people. I was confident that I was able to DJ well, "DJing" is a more conversational term
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I could not do my best, and I made many mistakes. |
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From then, I thought that I have to get better my DJ skill. From then on, I "I thought" doesn't quite sound right in this context. People generally use "I thought" when they were wrong about something, i.e. "I thought that you had a sister." The previous sentence implies that the person does not have a sister.
"Improve" is a more concise way to say "get better". |
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For success at next time, I want to improve my skill.
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