Dec. 1, 2021
I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window, the door and continuing whatever I was doing.
When the rain is forte, I usually just turn up the volume on my TV but I can't do that on my PC because its maximum volume is still too small to hear anything so I would just switch to do other things.
But the best thing to do on a rainy day is sleeping.
<p>I changed 'the rain is very loud' to 'the rain is forte' because I like to use new word but I don't know if it was correct or not.</p>
<p>I feel that my paragraphs is still too disconnected. There's just no flow to the my article *sob sob*</p>
Things I do on a rainy day.
I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window, and the door, and continuing whatever I was doing.
When the rain is forteloud, I usually just turn up the volume on my TV but. I can't do that on my PC because its maximum volume is still too smallquiet to hear anything, so I would just switch to do other things.
Forte is the wrong word. Did you think it would fit because it's "one's strength"?
I split off the PC part because the sentence felt too long. More specifically, though, the "but" didn't fit, since you were just talking about your TV.
A better start for the PC sentence would be: "I would turn up the volume of the PC, but its maximum volume is still too quiet to hear anything," because it offers contrast while keeping the topic of volume.
But the best thing to do on a rainy day is sleeping.
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Looks really good. Good job trying out new words, even if you're not sure - best way to learn.
Look up how to use commas some more, and how to use "but" better.
I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window, the and door and continuing whatever I was doing.
The original sentence makes it sound like there are three things you close: the window, the door, and "continuing whatever I was doing".
You could also put "the window and the door" instead of "the window and door" because both sound correct.
When the rain is forteloud, I usually just turn up the volume on my TV but I can't do that on my PC because its maximum volume is still too smalllow to hear anything so I would just switch to do other things.
"Forte" is only used for reading music when you play an instrument. It's not a word a lot of English speakers know. "Loud" works, but you could also use words that mean almost the same thing, like "heavy" or "intense".
The volume being "too small" doesn't sound right. The volume being "too low" or "too quiet" sounds better.
But the best thing to do on a rainy day is sleeping.
"Sleeping" could work here, but "sleep" sounds more natural.
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You did a good job! It's hard to try using new words, but you should definitely keep trying them out!
I like to sleep during rainy days too. It always sounds nice hearing the rain on the roof.
Things I do on a rainy day. |
I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window, the door and continuing whatever I was doing. I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window I'm a homebody so on a rainy day, I don't really do anything special other than closing the window The original sentence makes it sound like there are three things you close: the window, the door, and "continuing whatever I was doing".
You could also put "the window and the door" instead of "the window and door" because both sound correct. |
When the rain is forte, I usually just turn up the volume on my TV but I can't do that on my PC because its maximum volume is still too small to hear anything so I would just switch to do other things. When the rain is Forte is the wrong word. Did you think it would fit because it's "one's strength"?
I split off the PC part because the sentence felt too long. More specifically, though, the "but" didn't fit, since you were just talking about your TV. A better start for the PC sentence would be: "I would turn up the volume of the PC, but its maximum volume is still too quiet to hear anything," because it offers contrast while keeping the topic of volume. When the rain is "Forte" is only used for reading music when you play an instrument. It's not a word a lot of English speakers know. "Loud" works, but you could also use words that mean almost the same thing, like "heavy" or "intense".
The volume being "too small" doesn't sound right. The volume being "too low" or "too quiet" sounds better. |
But the best thing to do on a rainy day is sleeping. But the best thing to do on a rainy day is sleep "Sleeping" could work here, but "sleep" sounds more natural.
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