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ponta

March 29, 2021

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Take-off

I like take-off when boarding an airplane. Before take-off, airplanes slowly move toward a runway. After the air traffic controller let them go, the engines work strongly, and then I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat. Immediately following, resistance from the ground and noisy vibration disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off. I like this sequence.

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Take-off

I like take-off when boardingI'm on an airplane.

This sounds more natural in the US because "boarding" means getting on the airplane. We usually use "to ride" when actually on the airplane.

or

I like take-off when I'm riding on an airplane.
I like when the airplane takes off when I'm riding on an airplane.
The best part about riding on an airplane is the take-off.

Before take-off, airplanes slowly move toward a runway.

After the air traffic controller let them go, the engines work strongly, and thengives the pilots the okay, the engines start revving up, and I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat.

This sounds more natural in the US.

Immediately followingafterwards, resistance from the ground and the noisy vibrations disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off.

US alternative

I like how this sequencehappens.

Your sentence is correct but we don't really talk or write this way in the US.

or

I like this process.

Feedback

いいですね。

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ponta

March 31, 2021

217

丁寧な添削ありがとうございます!

Take-off

I like take-off when boarding an airplane.

Before take-off, airplanes slowly move toward a runway.

After the air traffic controller lets them go, the engines work strongly, and then I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat.

Immediately followingafter, resistance from the ground and the noisy vibrations disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off.

I like this sequence.

Feedback

Great job, I love this feeling too :)

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ponta

March 31, 2021

217

Thank you so much!

Take-off

I like take-off when boarding an airplane.

I like take-off when boardingI'm on an airplane.

Before take-off, airplanes slowly move toward a runway.

After the air traffic controller let them go, the engines work strongly, and then I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat.

After the air traffic controller lets them go, the engines work strongly, and then I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat.

After the air traffic controller let them go, the engines work strongly, and thengives the pilots the okay, the engines start revving up, and I feel the acceleration, pressed to the seat.

Immediately following, resistance from the ground and noisy vibration disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off.

Immediately followingafter, resistance from the ground and the noisy vibrations disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off.

Immediately followingafterwards, resistance from the ground and the noisy vibrations disappear, which means the airplane succeeded in taking off.

I like this sequence.

I like how this sequencehappens.

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