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ponta 310 · April 25

Target Language - English

I have several shoes in my shoe self but I realized I've been using only a few shoes among them. I usually use a black ordinary sneaker because it matches any kind of clothes and I really love its simple design. Also, I sometimes wear running shoes when I exercise or walk all day. Only in summer, I wear sandals if it's too hot.
I bought the black shoes two times because I used the first one frequently and it lost strength. I will use it regularly as long as the shoes are sold. After all, I only need a few shoes that I really like.


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secretpostman 0 April 25, 2021
Shoes
I have several shoes in my shoe self but I realized I've been using only a few shoes among them.

I have severalmany shoes ion my shoe shelf, but I realized I've been using only a few shoes amongpairs of them.

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It's a little strange to talk about "using" shoes. It's clear what you mean, but I think I would only use the word if I was talking about a specific purpose: "I use these shoes when I'm washing my car." "These are the shoes that I use for weightlifting." I don't think I would use it as a synonym for "to wear".

I suggest "many" for "several" because it sounds like a bigger number - "several shoes" could just be, like, three shoes. Not even three pairs, necessarily. And I change the second to avoid repetition and because we usually talk about pairs of shoes.
I usually use a black ordinary sneaker because it matches any kind of clothes and I really love its simple design.

I usually use a blackn ordinary black sneaker, because it matches any kind of clothes and I really love its simple design.

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Adjective order.

"Any kind of clothes" is a little unnatural. More likely: "it goes with anything", "it matches anything I wear", "it fits any outfit", "it suits any style".
Also, I sometimes wear running shoes when I exercise or walk all day.
Only in summer, I wear sandals if it's too hot.

Only in summer,And I wear sandals if it's too hot, but only in summer.

Maybe? Unclear why you chose "only" here.
I bought the black shoes two times because I used the first one frequently and it lost strength.

I bought the black shoes two timesice, because I used the first onepair frequently and it lost strengththey fell apart.

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Two times is okay but twice is more natural. "lost strength" is grammatical and it's clear what you mean but we probably wouldn't say it, we'd say they fell apart, started falling apart, came apart at the seams, started to break down, started to disintegrate, to deterioriate, or that they simply got worn out.
I will use it regularly as long as the shoes are sold.

I will use ithem regularly as long as the shoesy are sold.

After all, I only need a few shoes that I really like.

Overall feedback & comment:

My default shoes are a pair of Onitsuka Tigers :) Then I have a pair of dark brown suede chukkas for when the Tigers would be too informal, and leather boots when I anticipate rain or mud. It's nice to have more but I'll never understand people who accumulate hundreds of them.
Comment added on 04/25/2021