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April 17, 2022

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Report: new shopping centre (C1 CAE)

2. You work as an environmentalist for the local council. A large shopping centre has recently been built in your area.

You have been asked to visit the shopping centre and to write a report saying what effect the shopping centre might have on the local environment and the community.

Your report should state both the positive and the negative aspects of the shopping centre.

Finally, you should make some suggestions as to how the more negative aspects could be improved.

Write your report.

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What could make it sound more natural ?

Report on the effects of the new shopping centre in Utrera.

Introduction
In the last two years the tourism data in Utrera has experienced a huge decrease as a consequence of the improvement of several facilities and leisure areas in the city of Seville. Therefore, with the aim of recovery our previous position for tourists, it has been recently built a new shopping centre, which far from being suitable for most of citizens, it has been a topic especially controversial.

Social and environmental effects
According to the environmental impact assessment, which was written before the works started, the area selected is far enough from our streets and homes, as well as any natural park or reserve, as to have any direct negative impact. However, there is a long list of indirect effects both in people's health and nature. Of them all the main problem stressed by neighbours was the noise linked to the unexpected huge success of the new mall. This is a small city and people were used to a quieter way of life.

As regards environment, the main problem is the same, since noise affects the behaviour and growth of a lots of different species, especially birds, from the national park located 20 km away from Utrera, in the north of Seville.

Between the positive aspects, it can be highlighted the extraordinary success of this project. There have been never so many tourists here before, which has allowed the opening of several new shops and restaurants, which in turn means more jobs.

Suggestions
There was not a mandatory issue to build noise barriers along the highway that connect with the mall, since noise's law is pretty soft in this city. Nevertheless, this works must be done in order to avoid future European sanctions in environmental issues.

Conclusion
In conclusion, the new shopping centre will be an overall positive project for citizens in Utrera and nature surrounding the city provided that a noise barrier is built.


What could make it sound more natural ?

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What could make it sound more natural ?

Report on the effects of the new shopping centre in Utrera.

Introduction

In the last two years the tourism data in Utrera has experienced a huge decrease as a consequence of the improvement of several facilities and leisure areas in the city of Seville.

I think your use of the phrase "tourism data" here is correct but sounds a bit unnatural
If you want to talk about the data you could say "In the last two years, data shows that Utrera has experienced a huge decrease in tourism"

Therefore, with the aim of recovery our previous position for tourists, it has been recently built a new shopping a new shopping centre has been built recentrely , which far from being suitable for most of citizens, it has been a topicn especially controversial. topic

Your sentence makes sense but the word order sounded a bit disjointed and unnatural

you could also say "recently, a new shopping centre has been built"

Social and environmental effects

According to the environmental impact assessment, which was written before the works started, the area selected is far enough from our streets and homes, as well as any natural park or reserve, as to have any direct negative impact.

However, there is a long list of indirect effects both into people's health and nature.

This sentence makes sense btu it might sound more natural to say "to people's health" rather than "in" it
you could also say "for people's health" and this would make sense too.
also, if the nature you mean is like trees and the outdoors you might want to say "both to people's health and to nature", using the extra "to" before nature to clarify that the nature does not belong to the people. (because a person's nature has a different meaning as it could mean their personality or ethics)

This is a small city and people weare used to a quieter way of life.

"used to" here is more of an adjective because it describes how the people are, so even though it looks like it would be past tense, "are" makes more sense than "were" here because you said the city "is" small, which is present tense so you should stay in the same tense rather than switch to the past tense "were"

As rRegardsing the environment, the main problem is the same, since noise affects the behaviour and growth of a lots of different species, especially birds, from the national park located 20 km away from Utrera, in the north of Seville.

There have been never been so many tourists here before, which has allowed the opening of several new shops and restaurants, which in turn means more jobs.

There was not a mandatory issue to build noise barriers along the highway that connect with the mall, since noise's law islaws about noise are pretty soft in this city.

Nevertheless, this works must be done in order to avoid future European sanctions in environmental issues.

"this" is usually used before a singular or collective noun suggesting one unit of thing
example: "this cat" "this group of boys"
if you are talking about several "works" you could say "these works" as "these" is the plural form of this
example: "these cats" "these boys"

In conclusion, the new shopping centre will be an overall positive project for citizens in Utrera and nature surrounding the city provided that a noise barrier is built.

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isaac

April 18, 2022

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Thank you so much Severalducks for your corrections and comments.

Report: new shopping centre (C1 CAE)

2. You work as an environmentalist for the local council.

A large shopping centre has recently been built in your area.

You have been asked to visit the shopping centre and to write a report saying what effect the shopping centre might have on the local environment and the community.

Your report should state both the positive and the negative aspects of the shopping centre.

Finally, you should make some suggestions as to how the more negative aspects could be improved.

Write your report.

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What could make it sound more natural ?

Report on the effects of the new shopping centre in Utrera.

Introduction

In the last two years the tourism data in Utrera has experienced a huge decrease as a consequence of the improvement of several facilities and leisure areas in the city of Seville.

In the last two years the tourism data in Utrera has experienced a huge decrease as a consequence of the improvement of several facilities and leisure areas in the city of Seville.

Therefore, with the aim of recovery our previous position for tourists, it has been recently built a new shopping centre, which far from being suitable for most of citizens, it has been a topic especially controversial.

Therefore, with the aim of recovery our previous position for tourists, it has been recently built a new shopping a new shopping centre has been built recentrely , which far from being suitable for most of citizens, it has been a topicn especially controversial. topic

Social and environmental effects

According to the environmental impact assessment, which was written before the works started, the area selected is far enough from our streets and homes, as well as any natural park or reserve, as to have any direct negative impact.

However, there is a long list of indirect effects both in people's health and nature.

However, there is a long list of indirect effects both into people's health and nature.

Of them all the main problem stressed by neighbours was the noise linked to the unexpected huge success of the new mall.

This is a small city and people were used to a quieter way of life.

This is a small city and people weare used to a quieter way of life.

As regards environment, the main problem is the same, since noise affects the behaviour and growth of a lots of different species, especially birds, from the national park located 20 km away from Utrera, in the north of Seville.

As rRegardsing the environment, the main problem is the same, since noise affects the behaviour and growth of a lots of different species, especially birds, from the national park located 20 km away from Utrera, in the north of Seville.

Between the positive aspects, it can be highlighted the extraordinary success of this project.

There have been never so many tourists here before, which has allowed the opening of several new shops and restaurants, which in turn means more jobs.

There have been never been so many tourists here before, which has allowed the opening of several new shops and restaurants, which in turn means more jobs.

Suggestions

There was not a mandatory issue to build noise barriers along the highway that connect with the mall, since noise's law is pretty soft in this city.

There was not a mandatory issue to build noise barriers along the highway that connect with the mall, since noise's law islaws about noise are pretty soft in this city.

Nevertheless, this works must be done in order to avoid future European sanctions in environmental issues.

Nevertheless, this works must be done in order to avoid future European sanctions in environmental issues.

Conclusion

In conclusion, the new shopping centre will be an overall positive project for citizens in Utrera and nature surrounding the city provided that a noise barrier is built.

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