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Scarlett_farther

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An hour later, I went into a three-star standard hotel and found the exhibition hall on the second floor. Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman watching them, she was obviously pregnant. Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts at a corner, some paintings, porcelains and electricity wires were put everywhere.

The woman asked me first, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now in decoration, not opening yet."
"Oh, I just came from the job market, they gave me the address and asked me directly to come here." I answered.
"That's great, come on! You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, we're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days. They will come back in the afternoon, we are all waiting for them." She ushered me to the two girls at a corner saying, "You three clean the crafts first, he is your new colleague. I'm tired and will be leaving in minutes, a person will send some lunch meal here at 12:30 PM"

I was a little bit confused, who was "them", and who we were going to wait for?

The woman went away soon and left the others to continue working. I chatted with the two girls and got to know the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreign tourists, the boss was recruiting some new staff members who can speak English in the job market at the time.

The company was financed by a local travel agency and the lady who was in the job market then. The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, we called her Diana (I don't know why she has such a famous name which same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different).

At about 5 PM, another lady (I call her Sister Wang) went into the hall followed by seven young men and women.
She looked tired while looking at me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he? "
"Diana told us he is our new colleague, he has been working here with us the whole afternoon."
"Oh, welcome! Let's give a self-introduction one by one, we're into a family now!" Sister Wang looked at me with a warm smile.

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Life in SZ (7)

An hour later, I went into a three-star standard hotel and found the exhibition hall on the second floor.

Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman was watching them, s. She was obviously pregnant.

Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts atin a corner, s. Some paintings, porcelains ware and electricityal wires were put everywhere.

The woman askedtalked to me first, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now being decoration,ed so it is not opening yet.

"

"Oh, I just came from the job market, t. They gave me theyour address and asked me directly to come here directly," I answered."

I answered.

"That's great, c! Come on in!

You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, wnow. We're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days.

They will come back in the afternoon, so we are all waiting for them."

She ushered me to the two girls at ain the corner saying, "You three clean the crafts first, h. He is your new colleague.

I'm tired and will be leaving in a few minutes, a pers so someone will send somebring lunch meal here at 12:30 PM."

I was a little bit confused, who was "them", and who ware were going to wait for?

The woman went away soon and left the others to continue working.

I chatted with the two girls and got to know the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreigninternational tourists, t. The boss was recruiting some new staff members at the job market who canould speak English in the job market at the time.

The company was financed by a local travel agency and the lady who was inat the job market was from thenre.

The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, w. We called her Diana (I don't know why she hasd such a famous name which was the same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different).

At about 5 PM, another lady (I will call her Sister Wang) went into the hall followed by seven young men and women.

She looked tired whileand then lookinged at me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he?

"

"Diana told us he is our new colleague, h. He has been working here with us the whole afternoon."

"Oh, welcome!

Let's give a self-introduction one by one, wat a time. We're intoall a family now!"

Sister Wang looked at me with a warm smile.

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Scarlett_farther

Jan. 28, 2023

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多くの時間を費やしくれてありがと!

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Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman watchinged them, s. She was obviously pregnant.

While "She was obviously pregnant" is correct and makes sense, it might be a little more natural to say "She was clearly pregnant."

Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts atin a corner, s. Some paintings, porcelains sculptures, and electricity wires werehad been put everywhere.

I put "porcelain sculptures" because I wasn't sure what they were, but maybe they were vases? Or statues?

The woman asked me firstsaid to me, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now in decoraunder construction, it's not opening yet.

"Oh, I just came from the job market, they gave me the address and asked me directly to come here. directly,"

You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, we're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days.

She ushered me to the two girls at ain the corner, saying, "You three clean the crafts first, he is your new colleague.

I'm tired and will be leaving in a few minutes, a personsomeone will send some lunch meal here at 12:30 PM"

I was a little bit confused, w. Who was "them",someone," and who we were going to wait for?

I chatted with the two girls and got to know that the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreign tourists, and the boss was currently at the job market recruiting some new staff members who can speak English in the job market at the time.

The company was financed by a local travel agency, and by the lady who was inat the job market then.

It was a little unclear what this sentence meant, so I changed it to my best guess.

The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, we called her Diana (I don't know why she hasd such a famous name which was the same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different from each other).

She looked tired while looking atregarding me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he?

Your sentence was technically correct, but for a more natural sound, I changed it to avoid using "look" twice.

Let's give a self-introduction one by one, we're into a family now!"

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Nice work!

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Scarlett_farther

Jan. 27, 2023

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Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts atin a corner, s. Some paintings, porcelains sculptures, and electricity wires werehad been put everywhere.

I put "porcelain sculptures" because I wasn't sure what they were, but maybe they were vases? Or statues?

It's not limit to porcelain statues. After check Mari's correction, I think porcelain wares maybe better.

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Scarlett_farther

Jan. 27, 2023

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The company was financed by a local travel agency, and by the lady who was inat the job market then.

It was a little unclear what this sentence meant, so I changed it to my best guess.

Yes, you are right.

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Scarlett_farther

Jan. 27, 2023

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Thank you for your corrections! Spent you a lot time. :-)

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An hour later, I went into a three-star standard hotel and found the exhibition hall on the second floor.

Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman watching them, she was obviously pregnant.

Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman watchinged them, s. She was obviously pregnant.

Three workers were working at the site while a middle-aged woman was watching them, s. She was obviously pregnant.

Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts at a corner, some paintings, porcelains and electricity wires were put everywhere.

Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts atin a corner, s. Some paintings, porcelains sculptures, and electricity wires werehad been put everywhere.

Another two young girls were cleaning some crafts atin a corner, s. Some paintings, porcelains ware and electricityal wires were put everywhere.

The woman asked me first, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now in decoration, not opening yet.

The woman asked me firstsaid to me, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now in decoraunder construction, it's not opening yet.

The woman askedtalked to me first, "Hi, young man, the exhibition is now being decoration,ed so it is not opening yet.

"

"Oh, I just came from the job market, they gave me the address and asked me directly to come here."

"Oh, I just came from the job market, they gave me the address and asked me directly to come here. directly,"

"Oh, I just came from the job market, t. They gave me theyour address and asked me directly to come here directly," I answered."

I answered.

I answered.

"That's great, come on!

"That's great, c! Come on in!

You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, we're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days.

You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, we're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days.

You can help the two girls do some cleaning job now, wnow. We're so busy right now and the exhibition center is going to open to the public in three days.

They will come back in the afternoon, we are all waiting for them."

They will come back in the afternoon, so we are all waiting for them."

She ushered me to the two girls at a corner saying, "You three clean the crafts first, he is your new colleague.

She ushered me to the two girls at ain the corner, saying, "You three clean the crafts first, he is your new colleague.

She ushered me to the two girls at ain the corner saying, "You three clean the crafts first, h. He is your new colleague.

I'm tired and will be leaving in minutes, a person will send some lunch meal here at 12:30 PM"

I'm tired and will be leaving in a few minutes, a personsomeone will send some lunch meal here at 12:30 PM"

I'm tired and will be leaving in a few minutes, a pers so someone will send somebring lunch meal here at 12:30 PM."

I was a little bit confused, who was "them", and who we were going to wait for?

I was a little bit confused, w. Who was "them",someone," and who we were going to wait for?

I was a little bit confused, who was "them", and who ware were going to wait for?

The woman went away soon and left the others to continue working.

I chatted with the two girls and got to know the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreign tourists, the boss was recruiting some new staff members who can speak English in the job market at the time.

I chatted with the two girls and got to know that the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreign tourists, and the boss was currently at the job market recruiting some new staff members who can speak English in the job market at the time.

I chatted with the two girls and got to know the exhibition center was only prepared to open for foreigninternational tourists, t. The boss was recruiting some new staff members at the job market who canould speak English in the job market at the time.

The company was financed by a local travel agency and the lady who was in the job market then.

The company was financed by a local travel agency, and by the lady who was inat the job market then.

The company was financed by a local travel agency and the lady who was inat the job market was from thenre.

The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, we called her Diana (I don't know why she has such a famous name which same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different).

The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, we called her Diana (I don't know why she hasd such a famous name which was the same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different from each other).

The woman I met was the wife of the travel agency's boss, w. We called her Diana (I don't know why she hasd such a famous name which was the same as the Princess of Wales, because they were looked quite different).

At about 5 PM, another lady (I call her Sister Wang) went into the hall followed by seven young men and women.

At about 5 PM, another lady (I will call her Sister Wang) went into the hall followed by seven young men and women.

She looked tired while looking at me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he?

She looked tired while looking atregarding me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he?

She looked tired whileand then lookinged at me with strange eyes and asked the two girls, "Who is he?

"

"Diana told us he is our new colleague, he has been working here with us the whole afternoon."

"Diana told us he is our new colleague, h. He has been working here with us the whole afternoon."

"Oh, welcome!

Let's give a self-introduction one by one, we're into a family now!"

Let's give a self-introduction one by one, we're into a family now!"

Let's give a self-introduction one by one, wat a time. We're intoall a family now!"

Sister Wang looked at me with a warm smile.

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