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xiangying

Nov. 11, 2021

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John Lennon

Today my teacher shared a song by John Lennon called Imagine.
The song is very beautiful and the lyrics are also beautiful.
Tomorrow is the Rememberance day, this song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.
I googled John Lonnon, he was murdered by his fans, this is sad.
I sincerely hope the glory of peace will shine on every corner of the world, and there will be no more wars and killings in the word.

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John Lennon

Today, my teacher shared a song by John Lennon called Imagine.

When used at the beginning of the sentence, Today is an introductory word. Introductory words and phrases need a comma placed after them.

The song iwas very beautiful and the lyrics awere also beautiful.

You started talking about the song in the past tense (shared a song). Since you are talking about your feelings on the song, you will use to past tense.

Tomorrow is the Rememberance dDay, t. This song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.

You don't need a "the" before Remembrance Day. Since it is a holiday, Day should also be capitalized as the entire phrase is a proper noun. You should use a period here instead of a comma because you are connecting two complete thoughts. You could also say "Tomorrow is Remembrance Day and this song made us think about peace and to pray for peace."

I googled John Loennon, h. He was murdered by his fans, t. This is sad.

Complete thoughts need their own sentence or to be joined by conjunctions (words or phrases that connect two equally important ideas).

I sincerely hope the glory of peace will shine on every corner of the world, and that there will be no more wars and killings in the world.

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Great job! That is a very good song by John Lennon.

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xiangying

Nov. 11, 2021

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Thank you.

Today my teacher shared a song by John Lennon called Imagine.

The song is very beautiful and the lyrics are also beautiful.

Tomorrow is the Rememberance day, this song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.

I googled John Lonnon, he was murdered by his fans, this is sad.

I sincerely hope the glory of peace will shine on every corner of the world, and there will be no more wars and killings in the word.

John Lennon

Today my teacher shared a song by John Lennon called Imagine.

Today, my teacher shared a song by John Lennon called Imagine.

The song is very beautiful and the lyrics are also beautiful.

The song iwas very beautiful and the lyrics awere also beautiful.

Tomorrow is the Rememberance day, this song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.

Tomorrow is the Rememberance dDay, t. This song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.

Tomorrow is the Rememberance day, this song made us to think about peace and to pray for peace.

I googled John Lonnon, he was murdered by his fans, this is sad.

I googled John Loennon, h. He was murdered by his fans, t. This is sad.

I sincerely hope the glory of peace will shine on every corner of the world, and there will be no more wars and killings in the word.

I sincerely hope the glory of peace will shine on every corner of the world, and that there will be no more wars and killings in the world.

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