Aug. 20, 2022
I hate longboarding. It's awesome
Last summer I was completely heartbroken and depressed, so i decided to rebuild myself. I started to romanticize my life, to appreciate little things, - you know, those things that make you smile. And! I finally started longboarding. It was like love at first sight: that feeling of freedom is breathtaking.
But of course things couldn't be that perfect.
It was the hottest day ever. It was like, 36 C, and i decided to join some ice cream festival. Cruising towards the place of that event was fun; however, i didn't take into consideration the fact that my body doesn't handle heat well. So, putting so much pressure on my body under such terrible circumstances wasn't a wise move... and going downhill without proper preparation wasn't really smart either. So guess what? I got a heatstroke. And severe concussion. And i lacked some skin on my shoulder ... I couldn't get out of bed for 3 days or so because of terrible headache.
But i always recover from physical traumas really fast, so I count myself lucky. Unfortunately, can't say the same about my mental traumas. I was too scared to get on my board for 2 weeks. But i was able to overcome this fear, and I started going on small longboarding trips within my city - i still do that very often.
But speaking about this summer!!
I have a ...very brave friend who joins me on my skating days. And one day he talked me into going downhill again. I was riding my new board, it was a skateboard-cruiser. And once again I forgot to take that into consideration ;) While longboards are tailored for downhills, my skateboard isn't meant to be that stable on high speed.
And then a really terrible thing happened. Have you ever heard of speed wobble? I've seen this thousand times on some random Youtube videos, but I couldn't predict that I was going to experience this nightmare. Of cource I'm being too dramatic, that's just who I am, but I really wouldn't wish it on my worst enemy. When you get speed wobbles, your board starts to shake uncontrollably, and you end up on the ground, usually with lots of injuries... But I was lucky enough to jump off my board before falling. That was terrible though, and I still get nightmares about this sometimes.
And given all this background, I was dumb enough to try going downhill on the exact same board again!!! Of course that time I fell off my board, got a few scars... and, most importantly, I ruined my favourite Lil Peep's "cry baby" T-shirt. It used to be white, but now it's grey-ish.
But I won't stop. Never ever, no matter what. I'm in love with my boards, with that feeling of wind slipping through your fingers.
So, to paraphrase Kanye's catchphrase, "I hate longboarding. It's awesome".
I hate longboarding. It's awesome
How about "My Love/Hate Relationship with Longboarding" ?
Last summer, I was completely heartbroken and depressed, so iI decided to rebuild myself.
I started to romanticize my life, to appreciate little things, - you know, those things that make you smile.
"Romanticize" isn't quite right here. It has a connotation of believing something is better than it is.
And!
Only very rarely would someone use a single sentence "and". I might say, "What really changed things for me, was I finally started longboarding."
I finally started longboarding.
It was like love at first sight: thate feeling of freedom is breathtaking.
But oOf course, things couldn't be thatdon't always go so perfectly.
It was like,around 36 C, and iI decided to join somego to an ice cream festival.
Cruising towards the place of thatover to event was fun at first; however, iI didn't take into consideration the fact that my body doesn't handle heat well.
So, putting so much pressure on my body under such terrible circumstancesExerting myself in such hot weather wasn't a wise move... and going downhill without proper preparation wasn't really smart either.
And iI lackedost some skin on my shoulder ...
Multiple sentences starting with "and" is typically considered bad style.
I couldn't get out of bed for around 3 days or so because of terrible headache.
But iFortunately, I always recover well from physical traumas really fast, so I count myself lucky.
Unfortunately, can't say the same about my mental traumas.
I was too scared to get on my board for 2 weeks.
But iHowever, I was able to overcome this fear, and. I started going on small longboarding trips within my city - i, which I still do that very often.
Feedback
Good work. Just one main piece of feedback: starting a sentence with "but" or "and" is usually incorrect in writing and it's only used in speaking contexts. You can use joining words like "However,...", "Also,...", "Moreover,..." or simply remove them!
Aug. 20, 2022
Thank you so much for your corrections and good words!! ✨ I admit that i suck at written language, because I end up writing the same way I talk 😅
About the title: I wanted to use this phrase about "love/hate relationship" at first, but then I thought about that Kanye West's famous phrase: "I hate being myself, it's awesome", so I decided to use the same structure like an "eastern egg" 🤔
Thank you very much!!
Aug. 20, 2022
Your welcome! Practice makes perfect!
I didn't know the Kanye reference :p
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I finally started longboarding. |
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I started to romanticize my life, to appreciate little things, - you know, those things that make you smile. I started to romanticize my life, to appreciate little things, - you know, those things that make you smile. "Romanticize" isn't quite right here. It has a connotation of believing something is better than it is.
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I hate longboarding. It's awesome I hate longboarding. It's awesome How about "My Love/Hate Relationship with Longboarding" ?
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Last summer I was completely heartbroken and depressed, so i decided to rebuild myself. Last summer, I was completely heartbroken and depressed, so |
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And! And! Only very rarely would someone use a single sentence "and". I might say, "What really changed things for me, was I finally started longboarding."
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It was like love at first sight: that feeling of freedom is breathtaking. It was |
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But of course things couldn't be that perfect.
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It was the hottest day ever. |
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It was like, 36 C, and i decided to join some ice cream festival. It was |
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Cruising towards the place of that event was fun; however, i didn't take into consideration the fact that my body doesn't handle heat well. Cruising |
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So, putting so much pressure on my body under such terrible circumstances wasn't a wise move... and going downhill without proper preparation wasn't really smart either.
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So guess what? |
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I got a heatstroke. |
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And severe concussion. |
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And i lacked some skin on my shoulder ... And Multiple sentences starting with "and" is typically considered bad style.
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I couldn't get out of bed for 3 days or so because of terrible headache. I couldn't get out of bed for around 3 days |
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But i always recover from physical traumas really fast, so I count myself lucky.
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Unfortunately, can't say the same about my mental traumas. |
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I was too scared to get on my board for 2 weeks. |
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But i was able to overcome this fear, and I started going on small longboarding trips within my city - i still do that very often.
|
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But speaking about this summer!! |
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I have a ...very brave friend who joins me on my skating days. |
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And one day he talked me into going downhill again. |
|
I was riding my new board, it was a skateboard-cruiser. |
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And once again I forgot to take that into consideration ;) While longboards are tailored for downhills, my skateboard isn't meant to be that stable on high speed. |
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And then a really terrible thing happened. |
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Have you ever heard of speed wobble? |
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I've seen this thousand times on some random Youtube videos, but I couldn't predict that I was going to experience this nightmare. |
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Of cource I'm being too dramatic, that's just who I am, but I really wouldn't wish it on my worst enemy. |
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When you get speed wobbles, your board starts to shake uncontrollably, and you end up on the ground, usually with lots of injuries... |
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But I was lucky enough to jump off my board before falling. |
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That was terrible though, and I still get nightmares about this sometimes. |
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And given all this background, I was dumb enough to try going downhill on the exact same board again!!! |
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Of course that time I fell off my board, got a few scars... and, most importantly, I ruined my favourite Lil Peep's "cry baby" T-shirt. |
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It used to be white, but now it's grey-ish. |
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But I won't stop. |
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Never ever, no matter what. |
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I'm in love with my boards, with that feeling of wind slipping through your fingers. |
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So, to paraphrase Kanye's catchphrase, "I hate longboarding. |
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It's awesome". |
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