shiera's avatar
shiera

June 21, 2020

0
How to go forward even in hard times

Last Saturday night I got heartbroken. I broke up with him a year and a half ago. A trivial incident happened and I got so angry that I deleted all the data on the previous phone and changed phone numbers so that he couldn't contact me. I've tried hard to focus on studying English to forget him for a year but I couldn't. When things calmed down, I sent a message to him last November. He replied as before, so I thought we could get back together. But his reply was getting slow and stopped after he said he would go on a travel in December. I was waiting for his message. I started to use Facebook and found his account last Saturday. I knew his marriage in January there. I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat anything but water for a week. While I stayed home, I was going mad so I went out and kept walking around without destination for hours. Thanks to my big mask, no one was aware of my tears. He and I had the same sense of humor and many similarities. I belived we would be meant to be together. From his posts, I knew he had felt lonely after I left. From the last post which I can feel he was lonely until the next post, there was 8 months distance. This “the next post” is currently the last third post that he went traveling with someone. The last second post is the announcement that he and his wife say their wedding ceremony day. The last one is the wedding ceremony. From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in appearances and atmosphere. I wondered if he also suffered what I left. I couldn't stop crying.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don't feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones now. But I thank my friend. She also experienced hard times before.

Last Saturday night, there was “Back to the future” movie on TV. I got a big heartbreak right after it. Last night “Back to the future Part 2” came up on TV. I remembered I wanted to go to America when I was a teenager.
I've never been there, so I decided to plan of traveling to America. I'll go buy a guidebook fo America tomorrow.


ツラい時でも前へ進む方法

先週土曜日に失恋しました。一年半前に別れました。つまらない出来事があり、激怒した私は前のスマホのデータを全部消し、向こうから連絡とれないように電話番号を変えました。カレを忘れるために英語に没頭するよう頑張りました。けど忘れることはできませんでした。ほとぼりが冷めた頃、昨年の11月に私からメールしました。以前のように返事をしてきたので元に戻れると思いました。でも、徐々に返事が遅くなり、12月に旅行に行くと言ったきり連絡がこなくなりました。メールをずっと待ってました。フェイスブックを始め、カレのアカウントを先週の土曜日に見つけて知りました。カレは1月に結婚していました。あまりにも大打撃で、この一週間、水以外何も食べていません。家にいると気が変になりそうなので、外に出て、行き先もなく何時間も歩き続けました。デカマスクのおかげで、誰も私が泣いてることに気付きませんでした。カレと私は笑いのツボが同じで、似ているところがいっぱいありました。てっきり一緒になるもんだと信じてました。カレの投稿を見ると、私が去った後、彼も寂しがっていたことを知りました。寂しがってることがわかる最後の投稿から次の投稿までに8ヶ月間のブランクがあります。この「次の投稿」は彼の最新の投稿から3番目の投稿で、誰かと旅行に行ってるものです。最後から2番目がカレと奥さんが結婚式の日を知らせている投稿です。最後が結婚式の投稿です。ビデオを見ると、奥さんは見た目や雰囲気が少し私に似ていると思いました。私が去ったことを彼もまた苦しんでいたのだろうか。それを思うと涙が止まらなかった。
友人が言語交換イベントへ行くように勧めましたが、英会話を楽しむ気分ではありません。日本語でも今は会話したくないのに。でも友人には感謝しています。彼女もまた昔ツラい思いを経験しているから。
先週の土曜日の夜、テレビで『Back to the future』の映画をやっていました。その直後で大失恋をしました。昨日の夜『Back to the future Part 2』をテレビでやっていました。そして思い出しました。十代の頃、アメリカに行きたかったことを。まだアメリカへは行ったことがありません。アメリカ行きの旅行計画を練ることにしました。明日、アメリカのガイドブックを買いに行ってきます。

Corrections
3

Last Saturday night I gotwas heartbroken.

I broke up with him a year and a half ago.

A trivial incident happened and I got so angry that I deleted all the data on the previous phone and changed phone numbers so that he couldn't contact me.

I've tried hard to focus on studying English to forget him for a year but I couldn't.

When things calmed down, I sent a message to him last November.

He replied as before, so I thought we could get back together.

But his reply was getting slow and stopped after he said he would go on a travel in December.

I was waiting for his message.

I started to use Facebook and found his account last Saturday.

I knewfound out about his marriage in January there.

I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat or drink anything but water for a week.

While I stayed home, I was going mad so I went out and kept walking around without destination for hours.

Thanks to my big mask, no one was aware of my tears.

He and I had the same sense of humor and many similarities.

I believed we would bere meant to be together.

From his posts, I knew he had felt lonely after I left.

From the last post which I can feeI could tell he was lonely until the next post, therewhich was 8 months distancelater.

This “the next post” is currently the last third post that was the third to last post where he went traveling with someone.

The last second to last post iwas the announcement thatwhere he and his wife saytalked about their wedding ceremony day.

The last one iwas the wedding ceremony.

From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in appearances and atmosphcharactere.

I wondered if he also suffered whaten I left.

I couldn't stop crying.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don'idn’t feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones now.

But I thanked my friend.

She also experienced hard times before.

Last Saturday night, there was “Back to the future” movie on TV.

I got a big heartbreak right after it.

Last night, “Back to the future Part 2” came up on TV.

I remembered that I wanted to go to America when I was a teenager.

I've never been there, so I decided to plan of traveling to America.

I'll go buy a guidebook fo America tomorrow.

Feedback

Good job! Sorry if I misunderstood anything.

shiera's avatar
shiera

June 22, 2020

0

Thank you very much for correcting!!

How to go forward even in hard times

Last Saturday night, I gotwas heartbroken.

"Last Saturday night" is a transitional phrase in this sentence, so it needs a comma afterwards.

I broke up with him a year and a half ago.

A trivial incident happened, and I got so angry that I deleted all the data on themy previous phone and changed phone numbers so that he couldn't contact me.

I've tried hard for a year to focus on studying English to forget him for a year, but I couldn't do it.

It sounds better when you put "for a year" earlier

When things calmed down, I sent him a message to him last November.

you were right, but it sounds a little smoother this way

He replied aslike before, so I thought we could get back together.

ButHowever, his reply was getties were slowing sldown and stopped after he said he would go on a travelip in December.

You either "go on a trip" or you "travel to somewhere"

"slowing down" sounds better than "getting slow"

I was waiting for his message.

I started to use Facebook and found his account last Saturday.

I knewAfter looking at his profile, I found out about his marriage in January there.

I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat or drink anything but water for a week.

While I stayed home, I was going mad, so I went out and kept walking around without a destination for hours.

Thanks to my big mask, no one was aware of my tears.

He and I had the same sense of humor and many other similarities.

When you already list one thing in common, it sounds better to say "many other similarities" instead of "many similarities"

I believed we wouldere be meant to be together.

From his posts, I knew he had felt lonely after I left.

From theAfter his last post in which I can feeould tell he wasfelt lonely until the next post, there was 8 months distance, he didn't post anything for eight months.

sounds better this way, but "in which" is the formal way of saying "where". It's good to write "in which", but if you said this sentence in conversation, you'd probably say "where"

This “the next post” is currently the last third post thatIn this post, which is currently his third to last, he went traveling with someone else.

The last second pmost is the announcement that he and his wife say theircurrent post is his wedding ceremony day.announcement.

sounds smoother this way

The lasmost recent one is the wedding ceremony.

From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in terms of her appearances and atmosphere.personality.

I wondered if he also suffered whaten I left.

I couldn't stop crying.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don't feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones right now.

But anyway, I thank my friend.

She also experienced hard times before.

Last Saturday night, there was “Back to the future” moviewas on TV.

I got a bigfelt heartbreakoken right after it.

try to say you "feel heartbroken" instead of "getting a heartbreak"

Last night, "Back to the future Part 2” came upwas on TV.

I remembered I wanted to go to America when I was a teenager.

I've never been there, so I decided to plan tof traveling to America.

I'll go buy a guidebook fof America tomorrow.

Feedback

Great post!! You are really great at English, so a lot of my corrections were ways to make your sentence sound more natural/native. I hope it helps you!
I am really sorry about the situation between you and your ex-boyfriend. With time, I am sure you will feel better! It's okay to cry right now though, it'll help you get past it :)
I am so happy that you want to travel to America!! I recommend you go to New York City if you like cities, or Florida (I like West Palm Beach the most) or California if you want to see the beach :)

shiera's avatar
shiera

June 22, 2020

0

Thank you very much for correcting!!

My plan is to visit filming locations.
Yes I'll be going to New York. Columbia University for Spiderman😃 This University was also used for Ghostbusters. New York Public Library is a must😁

From Back to the future,
I'll visit Whittier high school in LA. Doc's garage was gone now, but there's a burger king restaurant nearby. I'll eat meal there😁

From Star Wars,
I'll go to Imperial Sand Dunes and Jedediah Smith Redwood State Park in California. I hope I can find a friend of Ewok😁

Thinking about the places I want to go pumps me up!! Thank you~

brambsie's avatar
brambsie

June 23, 2020

0

Oh, that sounds amazing!! I hope you have an amazing time! <3

How to go forward even in hard times

Last Saturday night I got heartbroken.

Last Saturday night I gotwas heartbroken.

Last Saturday night, I gotwas heartbroken.

I broke up with him a year and a half ago.

A trivial incident happened and I got so angry that I deleted all the data on the previous phone and changed phone numbers so that he couldn't contact me.

A trivial incident happened, and I got so angry that I deleted all the data on themy previous phone and changed phone numbers so that he couldn't contact me.

I've tried hard to focus on studying English to forget him for a year but I couldn't.

I've tried hard for a year to focus on studying English to forget him for a year, but I couldn't do it.

When things calmed down, I sent a message to him last November.

When things calmed down, I sent him a message to him last November.

He replied as before, so I thought we could get back together.

He replied aslike before, so I thought we could get back together.

But his reply was getting slow and stopped after he said he would go on a travel in December.

ButHowever, his reply was getties were slowing sldown and stopped after he said he would go on a travelip in December.

I was waiting for his message.

I started to use Facebook and found his account last Saturday.

I knew his marriage in January there.

I knewfound out about his marriage in January there.

I knewAfter looking at his profile, I found out about his marriage in January there.

I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat anything but water for a week.

I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat or drink anything but water for a week.

I was so heartbroken that I couldn't eat or drink anything but water for a week.

While I stayed home, I was going mad so I went out and kept walking around without destination for hours.

While I stayed home, I was going mad, so I went out and kept walking around without a destination for hours.

Thanks to my big mask, no one was aware of my tears.

He and I had the same sense of humor and many similarities.

He and I had the same sense of humor and many other similarities.

I belived we would be meant to be together.

I believed we would bere meant to be together.

I believed we wouldere be meant to be together.

From his posts, I knew he had felt lonely after I left.

From the last post which I can feel he was lonely until the next post, there was 8 months distance.

From the last post which I can feeI could tell he was lonely until the next post, therewhich was 8 months distancelater.

From theAfter his last post in which I can feeould tell he wasfelt lonely until the next post, there was 8 months distance, he didn't post anything for eight months.

This “the next post” is currently the last third post that he went traveling with someone.

This “the next post” is currently the last third post that was the third to last post where he went traveling with someone.

This “the next post” is currently the last third post thatIn this post, which is currently his third to last, he went traveling with someone else.

The last second post is the announcement that he and his wife say their wedding ceremony day.

The last second to last post iwas the announcement thatwhere he and his wife saytalked about their wedding ceremony day.

The last second pmost is the announcement that he and his wife say theircurrent post is his wedding ceremony day.announcement.

The last one is the wedding ceremony.

The last one iwas the wedding ceremony.

The lasmost recent one is the wedding ceremony.

From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in appearances and atmosphere.

From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in appearances and atmosphcharactere.

From the video, I thought his wife was a bit similar to me in terms of her appearances and atmosphere.personality.

I wondered if he also suffered what I left.

I wondered if he also suffered whaten I left.

I wondered if he also suffered whaten I left.

I couldn't stop crying.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don't feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones now.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don'idn’t feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones now.

A friend told me to attend a language exchange meetup, but I don't feel like enjoying English conversations, even Japanese ones right now.

But I thank my friend.

But I thanked my friend.

But anyway, I thank my friend.

She also experienced hard times before.

Last Saturday night, there was “Back to the future” movie on TV.

Last Saturday night, there was “Back to the future” moviewas on TV.

I got a big heartbreak right after it.

I got a bigfelt heartbreakoken right after it.

Last night “Back to the future Part 2” came up on TV.

Last night, "Back to the future Part 2” came upwas on TV.

Last night, “Back to the future Part 2” came up on TV.

I remembered I wanted to go to America when I was a teenager.

I remembered that I wanted to go to America when I was a teenager.

I've never been there, so I decided to plan of traveling to America.

I've never been there, so I decided to plan tof traveling to America.

I'll go buy a guidebook fo America tomorrow.

I'll go buy a guidebook fof America tomorrow.

You need LangCorrect Premium to access this feature.

Go Premium