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coco

Oct. 25, 2021

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How are you

Hi!

I don't know what should I write today, so I just gonna write something that's kinda weird.
How are you? What do you feel today? Feel happy? Sad? Upset? Comtentment?
I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, don't worry about me.
Today was raining, I like rain, because it can let me feel peaceful and quiet. But l like sunny too, it feels like confidence and happiness.
This afternoon was very terrible for me, I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened. It's fine, I can go over it.
I'm thinking of a question, what kind of person do I want to be? Be a successful person? Be a normal person? Or be a happy person. I'm still young, I still have a lot of space to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.
What kind of person that you want to become? Or what kind of person have you already become? Have you really become the person that you want to be when you were young?
It's fine if the answer is no because there don't have a lot of people who can actually do it.
Good night.




Have a great night, and have a great tomorrow. :)

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How are you

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How Are You? [capitals because it is a main title]
How are you?

Hi!

I don't know what should I write today, so I just gonna write something that's kinda weird.

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I don't know what I should write today, so I'm just going to write something that's kind of weird.

How are you?

What do you feel today?

Feel happy?

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Do you feel happy?

Sad?

Upset?

Comtentment?

I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, don't worry about me.

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I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine Don't worry about me.

Today was raining, I like rain, because it can let me feel peaceful and quiet.

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It was raining today. I like when it rains because then I feel at peace with myself.

But l like sunny too, it feels like confidence and happiness.

I like sunny weather, too because it makes me feel confident and happy.

This afternoon was very terrible for me, I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened.

This afternoon was very bad for me. I still feel a little bit sad about what happened.

I'm still young, and I still have a lot of space to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.

Feedback

You have put much feeling into your text, and that alone makes your writing very interesting for the reader. Well done!

However, I think this has been quite a complex piece of writing to do. It is the type of writing that is much easier to speak than to write! Writing text like this needs a firm understanding of punctuation and the rules of grammar and sentence building so that your reader may be able to pick-up exactly what you want him/her to know.

My advice to you would be that, if you are at the beginner stage, try to write in simple sentences that let you practise the basics of grammar and sentence-building with confidence. At this stage, try to keep to the basic "subject - verb - object" sentence-building method.

My overall impression is that once you have mastered the basics, you could go on to become a powerful writer of English.

Sincerely,
mjm

I don't know what should I write today, so I'm just gonna write something that's kinda weird.

What doHow are you feeling today?

Comtentment?

I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, so don't worry about me.

Today it was raining,. I like rain, because it can letmakes me feel peaceful and quietcalm and at peace.

But l like sunny too,weather too, because it feels like confidence and happiness.

This afternoon was very terrible for me,. I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened.

It's fine, I can goet over it.

I'm thinking of a question,: what kind of person do I want to be?

Be aA successful person?

Be aA normal person?

Or be a happy person.?

I'm still young, I still have a lot of spactime to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.

What kind of person thatdo you want to become?

Have you really become the person that you wanted to be when you were young?

It's fine if the answer is no, because there doaren't have a lot of people who can actually do isay they've achieved that.

Feedback

Great job! Your ideas were very clear and understandable. Just work on a few grammar and usage points to make things sound a bit more natural.

How are you

How are you

Hi!

I don't know what should I write today, so I just gonna write something that's kinda weird.

I don't know what should I write today, so I'm just gonna write something that's kinda weird.

I don't know what should I write today, so I just gonna write something that's kinda weird.

How are you?

What do you feel today?

What doHow are you feeling today?

Feel happy?

Feel happy?

Sad?

Upset?

Comtentment?

Comtentment?

Comtentment?

I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, don't worry about me.

I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, so don't worry about me.

I feel a little sad and angry today, but I'm fine, don't worry about me.

Today was raining, I like rain, because it can let me feel peaceful and quiet.

Today it was raining,. I like rain, because it can letmakes me feel peaceful and quietcalm and at peace.

Today was raining, I like rain, because it can let me feel peaceful and quiet.

But l like sunny too, it feels like confidence and happiness.

But l like sunny too,weather too, because it feels like confidence and happiness.

But l like sunny too, it feels like confidence and happiness.

This afternoon was very terrible for me, I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened.

This afternoon was very terrible for me,. I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened.

This afternoon was very terrible for me, I still feel a little bit sad about what just happened.

It's fine, I can go over it.

It's fine, I can goet over it.

I'm thinking of a question, what kind of person do I want to be?

I'm thinking of a question,: what kind of person do I want to be?

Be a successful person?

Be aA successful person?

Be a normal person?

Be aA normal person?

Or be a happy person.

Or be a happy person.?

I'm still young, I still have a lot of space to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.

I'm still young, I still have a lot of spactime to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.

I'm still young, and I still have a lot of space to grow up and to make mistakes, but I should begin to plan my life.

What kind of person that you want to become?

What kind of person thatdo you want to become?

Or what kind of person have you already become?

Have you really become the person that you want to be when you were young?

Have you really become the person that you wanted to be when you were young?

It's fine if the answer is no because there don't have a lot of people who can actually do it.

It's fine if the answer is no, because there doaren't have a lot of people who can actually do isay they've achieved that.

Good night.

Have a great night, and have a great tomorrow.

:)

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