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April 9, 2022

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Essay: "Ancient Greek/Latin or Computer sciences at school

You have listened to a radio programme about which courses should be included in secondary schools' curricula.

Which course should be included in secondary schools' curricula?
- Ancient Greek and Latin
- Computer course
- Plumbing course

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:
- "Computer Science is more important than ancient languages"
-"All students need to know about Latin and Ancient Greek authors"
-"We should include courses that teach something useful and practical to students!"

Write an essay discussing two of the courses in your notes. You should explain which course should be included in secondary schools' curricula, giving reasons in support of your answer .
You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best courses to be included in students' curricula at secondary school. They mainly stress in two classes, that is Ancient Greek and Latin and computer sciences.

In my humble opinion, courses, especially in the secondary education system should be focused on those (useful) matters that students will not learn about by themselves, unless these classes are part of the academic record. Over and over we can see how non-technical subject, like Ancient Greek, are rejected from the list of subjects.

As regards the necessity of a computer science course, I cannot see the point on teaching about a "tool" that children already know at primary school, even earlier (some babies, unfortunately, "have grown up in front of a screen"). This opinion is opposite to one participant in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how computer works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

Even though in case programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives. If they want to be programmers, they would study it at appropriate colleges or universities from the ground zero. Not everyone will need this knowledge in the future in their professions.

As I see it would be more worth spend the limited academic resources into a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension their languages, from which came the different currently languages in Europe and America.


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I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best coursesubjects to be included in students' curricula at secondary school.

They mainly stress in two classes, that isfocused on two subjects, namely Ancient Greek and Latin and computer sciences.

No serían 3 asignaturas? griego, latín e informática

In my humble opinion, courseschool subjects, especially those in the secondary education system, should be focused on those (useful) mattersuseful facets of life that students will not be able to learn about by themselves, unless theose classes are part of thenecessary for academic records.

Over and over we can see how non-technical subjects, like Ancient Greek, are rejectedtaken off from the list of subjects.

As regards the necessity of a computer science course, I cannodon't see the point onf teaching about a "tool" that children already know at primary school, or even earlier (some babies, unfortunately, "have grown up in front of a screen").

This opinion is opposite to ondiffers from that of one of the participants in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how a computer works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

Even though in case programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives.

No entiendo esta parte.

If they want to be programmers, they would study it at appropriate colleges or universities from the ground zeroscratch.

AsFrom the way I see it, it would be more worthwhile to spend the limited academic resources into a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to the fact that ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension, their languages, from which came the different currentlygave birth to the modern languages in Europe and America.

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isaac

April 16, 2022

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Gracias de nuevo Applebubble, no fallas una : )

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applebubble

April 16, 2022

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jajaj :)

You have listened to a radio programme about which courses should be included in secondarythe high schools' curriculaum.

Which courses should be included in the secondary schools' curriculaum?

Courses is plural for course, I don't know if you meant it to be singular, but I thought it would make more sense since you listed more than one course later.

I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best courses to be included in a students's curriculaum at secondary school.

In my humble opinion, courses, especially in the secondary education system should be focused on those (useful) matters that students will not learn about by themselves, unless these classes are part of the academic record.

This opinion is opposite todiffers from one participant in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how computers works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

Even though, in the case of programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives.

Not everyone will need this knowledge in their future in their professions.

'in the future in their professions' is a little awkward and wordy. Shortening it to their future professions still implies the same message.

As I seeI think it would be more worth spending the limited academic resources inton a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension their languages, from which came the different currently languages in Europe and America.

More natural starts to an opinion include: In my opinion, In my eyes, The way I see it, I think, etcetera. However, 'As I see it' is also a great start. You should have just included 'it'. Like this: 'As I see it, it would be...'

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isaac

April 16, 2022

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Thank you so much Hadespinkus, your corrections are very useful.

Essay: "Ancient Greek/Latin or Computer sciences at school

You have listened to a radio programme about which courses should be included in secondary schools' curricula.

You have listened to a radio programme about which courses should be included in secondarythe high schools' curriculaum.

Which course should be included in secondary schools' curricula?

Which courses should be included in the secondary schools' curriculaum?

- Ancient Greek and Latin

- Computer course

- Plumbing course

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

- "Computer Science is more important than ancient languages"

-"All students need to know about Latin and Ancient Greek authors"

-"We should include courses that teach something useful and practical to students!

"

Write an essay discussing two of the courses in your notes.

You should explain which course should be included in secondary schools' curricula, giving reasons in support of your answer .

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should use your own words as far as possible.

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(What could make it sound more natural? )

I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best courses to be included in students' curricula at secondary school.

I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best coursesubjects to be included in students' curricula at secondary school.

I recently listened to a radio program in which participants were discussing what would be the best courses to be included in a students's curriculaum at secondary school.

They mainly stress in two classes, that is Ancient Greek and Latin and computer sciences.

They mainly stress in two classes, that isfocused on two subjects, namely Ancient Greek and Latin and computer sciences.

In my humble opinion, courses, especially in the secondary education system should be focused on those (useful) matters that students will not learn about by themselves, unless these classes are part of the academic record.

In my humble opinion, courseschool subjects, especially those in the secondary education system, should be focused on those (useful) mattersuseful facets of life that students will not be able to learn about by themselves, unless theose classes are part of thenecessary for academic records.

In my humble opinion, courses, especially in the secondary education system should be focused on those (useful) matters that students will not learn about by themselves, unless these classes are part of the academic record.

Over and over we can see how non-technical subject, like Ancient Greek, are rejected from the list of subjects.

Over and over we can see how non-technical subjects, like Ancient Greek, are rejectedtaken off from the list of subjects.

As regards the necessity of a computer science course, I cannot see the point on teaching about a "tool" that children already know at primary school, even earlier (some babies, unfortunately, "have grown up in front of a screen").

As regards the necessity of a computer science course, I cannodon't see the point onf teaching about a "tool" that children already know at primary school, or even earlier (some babies, unfortunately, "have grown up in front of a screen").

This opinion is opposite to one participant in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how computer works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

This opinion is opposite to ondiffers from that of one of the participants in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how a computer works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

This opinion is opposite todiffers from one participant in the radio program who said in an ironical way that learning how computers works was likely to be more useful than learning dead languages.

Even though in case programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives.

Even though in case programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives.

Even though, in the case of programming courses, since students must learn about a topic in the correct moments of their lives.

If they want to be programmers, they would study it at appropriate colleges or universities from the ground zero.

If they want to be programmers, they would study it at appropriate colleges or universities from the ground zeroscratch.

Not everyone will need this knowledge in the future in their professions.

Not everyone will need this knowledge in their future in their professions.

As I see it would be more worth spend the limited academic resources into a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension their languages, from which came the different currently languages in Europe and America.

AsFrom the way I see it, it would be more worthwhile to spend the limited academic resources into a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to the fact that ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension, their languages, from which came the different currentlygave birth to the modern languages in Europe and America.

As I seeI think it would be more worth spending the limited academic resources inton a course in Ancient Greek and Latin, due to ancient Romans and Greeks represent the cradle of our civilization, and by extension their languages, from which came the different currently languages in Europe and America.

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