June 3, 2021
Day Three
I guess the impression for myself is quite different between my friends and my family. I have an elder sister, and she has been well behaved. I was not like that, so my family would say I am naughty. Moreover, my friends who know me when I lived in my hometown would say I am irresponsible about studying, and eager to my club activity. I was not interested in learning at that time. I often slept during classes and got bad grades on many subjects. On the other hand, my friends who got to know me within these two years would say I am diligent and disciplined. This is because I changed my mind and started to work hard.
I guessthink the impression ofor myself is quite different between my friends and my family.
"I guess" is okay to use here, but here it might be better to use "I think" - it feels a bit weird to start off with "I guess", since it's more casual. (Never use it in formal writing, like essays.) Since a journal is pretty casual, you can use "I guess" when you want to add on to something you have said previously. For instance:
"My family thinks I am irresponsible. I guess this is because I always got bad grades."
"My family thinks I'm naughty. I guess it's true."
"impression of [something]", not "impression for [something]"
Other suggestions:
"I think my friends and family have different impressions of me."
"I guess you could say that my friends and family have different impressions of me." <-- a little more natural, if you want to start with "I guess"
I have an elder sister, and she has beenwho is more well -behaved than me.
"she has been well behaved" sounds strange here... I changed it so that it fits better in your paragraph here, comparing you and your sister.
I was not like that, so my family would say I am naughty.
Moreover, my friends who knoew me when I lived in my hometown would say that I am irresponsible about studying, and eager to participate in my club activity.
know -> knew (when referring to something in the past)
I was not interested in learning at that time.
I often slept during classes and got bad grades on many subjects.
On the other hand, my friends who got to know me within these two years would say I am diligent and disciplined.
This is because I changed my mind and started to work hard.
Feedback
Cool, I wonder how you changed your mind... good job, continue working hard then!
June 4, 2021
Thank you so much! I had respectable friends or role models, which highly motivated me.
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I guess the impression for myself is quite different between my friends and my family. I "I guess" is okay to use here, but here it might be better to use "I think" - it feels a bit weird to start off with "I guess", since it's more casual. (Never use it in formal writing, like essays.) Since a journal is pretty casual, you can use "I guess" when you want to add on to something you have said previously. For instance:
"My family thinks I am irresponsible. I guess this is because I always got bad grades." "My family thinks I'm naughty. I guess it's true." "impression of [something]", not "impression for [something]" Other suggestions: "I think my friends and family have different impressions of me." "I guess you could say that my friends and family have different impressions of me." <-- a little more natural, if you want to start with "I guess" |
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I have an elder sister, and she has been well behaved. I have an elder sister, "she has been well behaved" sounds strange here... I changed it so that it fits better in your paragraph here, comparing you and your sister.
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I was not like that, so my family would say I am naughty. |
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Moreover, my friends who know me when I lived in my hometown would say I am irresponsible about studying, and eager to my club activity. Moreover, my friends who kn know -> knew (when referring to something in the past)
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I was not interested in learning at that time. |
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I often slept during classes and got bad grades on many subjects. |
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On the other hand, my friends who got to know me within these two years would say I am diligent and disciplined. |
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This is because I changed my mind and started to work hard. |
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