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Sep 29

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Cicada

Because Taiwan is entering autumn, it's gradually difficult to hear cicadas singing outside now.

The life span of a cicada is about 12 to15 years, which is actually not short compared to those of other animals.

However, they spend 99.9% of their life underground.

After they emerge from the dark word as adults, they only have one to ten weeks at best left to live.

Li Shangyin, a Chinese poet in the Tang dynasty, wrote with a sigh, "The sunset is magnificent, but the dusk is approaching."

Perhaps his short poem, which indicates beautiful things are always fleeting, can aptly reflect a cicada's life.

When a cicada enters its prime time, it is about to die.

Perhaps that's why cicadas are always singing.

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Because Taiwan is entering autumn, it's gradually difficult to hear cicadas singing outside now.

Because Taiwan is entering autumn, it's gradually becoming more difficult to hear find cicadas singing outside now.

“Difficult to hear” sounds like their buzzing is getting quieter, or maybe you’ve shut your windows against the cold and therefore the sound doesn’t carry indoors to your ears. “Difficult to find (them) singing” works better, in my opinion.
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Because Taiwan is entering autumn, it's becoming gradually more difficult to hear cicadas singing outside now.

If you use the word "gradually", it seems better to me to use the verb "becoming" since anything gradual is a process and add "more" before "difficult" to indicate a level of degree. I hope that makes sense; it's tough to explain why.
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The life span of a cicada is about 12 to15 years, which is actually not short compared to those of other animals.

The life span of a cicada is about 12 to 15 years, which is actually not short compared to (those of) other animals.

“Those of” isn’t wrong, but it would be more natural to omit it.
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However, they spend 99.9% of their life underground.

After they emerge from the dark word as adults, they only have one to ten weeks at best left to live.

After they emerge from theat dark world as adults, they only have one to ten weeks at best left to live.

I think this was just a typo; I presume you meant "world" instead of "word". Also, I added "that" instead of "the" before "dark world" because it indicates that you are referring back to the fact you just gave, that they spend most of their life underground. If you use "the" in this case, it might sound a bit like "the dark world" is a known concept/place that everyone is familiar with, rather than just underground. (Great word choice to describe it, by the way!)
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Li Shangyin, a Chinese poet in the Tang dynasty, wrote with a sigh, "The sunset is magnificent, but the dusk is approaching.

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Perhaps his short poem, which indicates beautiful things are always fleeting, can aptly reflect a cicada's life.

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When a cicada enters its prime time, it is about to die.

When a cicada enters its prime time, it is about to die.

It’s only the cicada’s “prime” in our opinion. Maybe to a cicada, its prime happened underground, and now it’s happy that it can finally die. :-)
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Perhaps that's why cicadas are always singing.

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