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Jan. 14, 2020

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Arrive school early in the morning.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students should arrive school early in the morning.


As the competition for college education becomes severe, more and more parents begin to pay special attention to their children’s education since entering a kindergarten. Many people strongly support that students should arrive school early in the morning, while others disregard this opinion. Personally, I would side with the latter.

Firstly, students’ concentrations will reduce when they do not get enough sleep. With fewer sleep students get, their brains are in unclear situations so that they are not able to concentrate on study. Students are too sleepy to pay attention on studies. Most Asian countries, for instance, students need to attend the first class at school at seven o’clock every morning. During finals, especially, a lot of students are afraid of getting a score that their parents are not satisfied with, they always stay up all night for studying. In this way, they sleep three or four hours only, going to school early, so they are unable focus on teacher who teaches the first class in the morning. Thus, is it better to go to school early? Do parents yearn their children to pay less attention on lesson?

In addition, young people rush to eat breakfast or even skip the first meal in order to arrive school early. If young children do not have a nutrient breakfast, it is possible that they have some health problem, such as growing slow or overweigh. Suppose young kids wake up at six o’clock, having a class at seven, they do not have enough time to sit down, eat slowly and have a beautiful breakfast time with family. In this way, students can not produce great energy to study.


Of course, some people might state that students should go to school early in the morning, it either has abundant time to learn more academic studies, or spare more time to study not just the textbook but knowledge relevant to it. For one thing, time is a luxury property, students should seriously grasp any chance to learn as much as possible, so that they are able to enter a good school in the future. However, students arrive school early in the morning, they not only have less time to sleep, but cause some health problems as well. Taking care of children’s physical and mental health, after all, is a more sagacious choice.

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Arrive [at] school early in the morning.

As the competition for college education becomes [increasingly] severe, more and more parents begin to pay special attention to their children’s education sinceupon entering a kindergarten.

Many people strongly support the idea that that students should arrive school early in the morning, while others disregard this opinionagree.

Personally, I would side with the latter.

Firstly, students’ concentrations will is reduced when they do not get enough sleep.

With fewerThe less sleep students get, their brains are in unclear situations more unclear they think, so that they are unot able to fully concentrate on studying.

Students are too sleepy to pay full attention on their studies.

During finals, especially, a lot of students are afraid of getting a score that their parents are not satisfied with, t. They alwaysend up staying up all night forto studying.

In this way, theStudents only sleep three or four hours only, goingbecause they must go to school early, and in this way so they are unable focus on teacheir who teachesr in the first class in the morning.

ThusSo, is it better to go to school early?

Do parents yearnwant their children to pay less attention oin lessons?

Put this rhetorical question lower in the argument.

In additionMoreover, young people rush to eat breakfast or even skip the first meal in order to arrive at school early.

If young children do not have a nutrienttious breakfast, it is possible that they have somemay develop health problems, such as growing slow or becoming overweight.

Suppose young kids wake up at six o’clock, and havinge a class at seven,; they do not have enough time to sit down, eat slowly, and have a beautifulproper breakfast time with family.

In this way, students can not produce greatbring enough energy to studying.

Of course, some people might state that students should go to school early in the morning, i. It either has abundant time to learn moregives more time for academic studieswork, or spare mores time to study not just what's in the textbooks but knowledge relevant to ithem.

For one thing, they say, time is a luxury property, s. Students should seriously grasp any chance to learn as much as possible, so that they are able to enter a good school in the future.

However, at the same time, if students arrive school early in the morning, they not only have less time to sleep, but cause somemay develop health problems as well.

TFor me, taking care of children’s physical and mental health, after all, is athe more sagaciousprudent choice.

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You have a good way with words. If possible, more often differentiate other's opinions from your own. The reader should always be clear on your position; its okay to remind them. Love the subject matter. Good luck!

Arrive school early in the morning.

Arrive [at] school early in the morning.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Students should arrive school early in the morning.

As the competition for college education becomes severe, more and more parents begin to pay special attention to their children’s education since entering a kindergarten.

As the competition for college education becomes [increasingly] severe, more and more parents begin to pay special attention to their children’s education sinceupon entering a kindergarten.

Many people strongly support that students should arrive school early in the morning, while others disregard this opinion.

Many people strongly support the idea that that students should arrive school early in the morning, while others disregard this opinionagree.

Personally, I would side with the latter.

Personally, I would side with the latter.

Firstly, students’ concentrations will reduce when they do not get enough sleep.

Firstly, students’ concentrations will is reduced when they do not get enough sleep.

With fewer sleep students get, their brains are in unclear situations so that they are not able to concentrate on study.

With fewerThe less sleep students get, their brains are in unclear situations more unclear they think, so that they are unot able to fully concentrate on studying.

Students are too sleepy to pay attention on studies.

Students are too sleepy to pay full attention on their studies.

Most Asian countries, for instance, students need to attend the first class at school at seven o’clock every morning.

During finals, especially, a lot of students are afraid of getting a score that their parents are not satisfied with, they always stay up all night for studying.

During finals, especially, a lot of students are afraid of getting a score that their parents are not satisfied with, t. They alwaysend up staying up all night forto studying.

In this way, they sleep three or four hours only, going to school early, so they are unable focus on teacher who teaches the first class in the morning.

In this way, theStudents only sleep three or four hours only, goingbecause they must go to school early, and in this way so they are unable focus on teacheir who teachesr in the first class in the morning.

Thus, is it better to go to school early?

ThusSo, is it better to go to school early?

Do parents yearn their children to pay less attention on lesson?

Do parents yearnwant their children to pay less attention oin lessons?

In addition, young people rush to eat breakfast or even skip the first meal in order to arrive school early.

In additionMoreover, young people rush to eat breakfast or even skip the first meal in order to arrive at school early.

If young children do not have a nutrient breakfast, it is possible that they have some health problem, such as growing slow or overweigh.

If young children do not have a nutrienttious breakfast, it is possible that they have somemay develop health problems, such as growing slow or becoming overweight.

Suppose young kids wake up at six o’clock, having a class at seven, they do not have enough time to sit down, eat slowly and have a beautiful breakfast time with family.

Suppose young kids wake up at six o’clock, and havinge a class at seven,; they do not have enough time to sit down, eat slowly, and have a beautifulproper breakfast time with family.

In this way, students can not produce great energy to study.

In this way, students can not produce greatbring enough energy to studying.

Of course, some people might state that students should go to school early in the morning, it either has abundant time to learn more academic studies, or spare more time to study not just the textbook but knowledge relevant to it.

Of course, some people might state that students should go to school early in the morning, i. It either has abundant time to learn moregives more time for academic studieswork, or spare mores time to study not just what's in the textbooks but knowledge relevant to ithem.

For one thing, time is a luxury property, students should seriously grasp any chance to learn as much as possible, so that they are able to enter a good school in the future.

For one thing, they say, time is a luxury property, s. Students should seriously grasp any chance to learn as much as possible, so that they are able to enter a good school in the future.

However, students arrive school early in the morning, they not only have less time to sleep, but cause some health problems as well.

However, at the same time, if students arrive school early in the morning, they not only have less time to sleep, but cause somemay develop health problems as well.

Taking care of children’s physical and mental health, after all, is a more sagacious choice.

TFor me, taking care of children’s physical and mental health, after all, is athe more sagaciousprudent choice.

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