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Sept. 29, 2022

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An article: Future dreams ( details in notes )

I don't like to use the dream as a word here. It sounds like an old tune. I just would like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.
I am going to finding a intership since I alreday experienced 6 times interships. After that I am going to continue my studying in University, after two years I am going to graduate and get a bachelor degree (I hope I can). And then, I need to get a job first wtih not very low salary can help me survie in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, also enjoying the life myself. In the left two years, I am going to try some ways to run a small business. As a university student, this two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste it. I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.
What kind of person I am going to be? I hope I can keep kind, honest and love to myself. I hope I can be more powerful and shining, in this case, people around me will feel safe and at ease.
Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step, down to earth.


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An article: Future dreams ( details in notes )

I don't like to use the dream as a wordwould rather not use the word “dream” here.

It sounds like something from an old tune/song.

“Song” sounds more natural to me in this context.

As a university student, thisese next two years may be the most [causal] (carefree?) time in my life, and I should not waste it.

Do you really mean “causal”?
Causal: “connected with the relationship between two things, where one causes the other to happen”
https://www.oxfordlearnersdictionaries.com/definition/english/causal?q=causal

Maybe you misspelled “casual”? If so, I’d suggest replacing it with “carefree.”

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I, too, am unfamiliar with this usage of “set a flag.”

What kind of person I am I going to be?

I hope I can keep being kind, honest and loveing to myself.

Another possibility:
“I hope I can remain kind, honest and self-loving.”
(This means you want to treat others with kindness and honesty, and treat yourself with love.)

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666coolboy

Oct. 1, 2022

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Thank you for editing!

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JoeTofu

Oct. 1, 2022

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I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I, too, am unfamiliar with this usage of “set a flag.”

So, what do you mean by "set a flag"? 用中文或英文解释都可以

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666coolboy

Oct. 2, 2022

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在中文语境中,有一个梗叫“立flag“。意思是设立了一个目标说出来,后面很可能要出问题。
比如说在影视作品中,一个反派配角说自己是无敌的,通常他后面就要死掉,这就是不要立flag的由来。
In Chinese context, there is a meme called "set a flag". It means if you set a goal and said it out loundly, it might meets problems. For example, in film and television works, a villain supporting role said he is invincible, usually he will die later, the is the reason not to set up a flag.

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JoeTofu

Oct. 2, 2022

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Oh, that’s interesting. Thanks for explaining it. I’ll see if I can think of a suitable expression in English….

I just would just like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.

I am going to finding a another internship since I have alredady experienced them 6 times interships.

After that, I am going to continue my studyingies in University, after. In two years, I am going to graduate and get a bachelor's degree (I hope I can).

Andfter thenat, I need to get a job first wtihjob with a not very low salary can. This would help me survive in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, while also enjoying the life myself.

In the left two years remaining, I am going to try to learn some ways to run a small business.

As a university student, thisese two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste ithem.

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

Unclear meaning - "set a flag" is not a phrase I am familiar with

I hope I can keepstay kind, honest, and love to myself.

Oxford comma after the honest is optional, but typically used in informal settings

I hope I can be more powerful and shining, ie. In this caseway, people around me will feel safe and at ease.

Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step,at a time and remain down to earth.

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666coolboy

Oct. 1, 2022

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Thank you!

An article: Future dreams ( details in notes )

I don't like to use the dream as a word here.

I don't like to use the dream as a wordwould rather not use the word “dream” here.

It sounds like an old tune.

It sounds like something from an old tune/song.

I just would like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.

I just would just like to talk about what I am going to do, and what kind of person I am going to be.

I am going to finding a intership since I alreday experienced 6 times interships.

I am going to finding a another internship since I have alredady experienced them 6 times interships.

After that I am going to continue my studying in University, after two years I am going to graduate and get a bachelor degree (I hope I can).

After that, I am going to continue my studyingies in University, after. In two years, I am going to graduate and get a bachelor's degree (I hope I can).

And then, I need to get a job first wtih not very low salary can help me survie in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, also enjoying the life myself.

Andfter thenat, I need to get a job first wtihjob with a not very low salary can. This would help me survive in the society and take some money to treat my parents and friends well, while also enjoying the life myself.

In the left two years, I am going to try some ways to run a small business.

In the left two years remaining, I am going to try to learn some ways to run a small business.

As a university student, this two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste it.

As a university student, thisese two years may be the most causal time in my life and I should not waste ithem.

As a university student, thisese next two years may be the most [causal] (carefree?) time in my life, and I should not waste it.

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

I don't want to set a flag but I hope I can do it.

What kind of person I am going to be?

What kind of person I am I going to be?

I hope I can keep kind, honest and love to myself.

I hope I can keepstay kind, honest, and love to myself.

I hope I can keep being kind, honest and loveing to myself.

I hope I can be more powerful and shining, in this case, people around me will feel safe and at ease.

I hope I can be more powerful and shining, ie. In this caseway, people around me will feel safe and at ease.

Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step, down to earth.

Time is passing by, let me do it one step by one step,at a time and remain down to earth.

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