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shiera

July 5, 2020

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A New Business

A friend of mine quit her office work and started the cafe business.
In the menu of her cafe, mainly healthy food and drinks are included. But not only food service, she's going to make the cafe community-based multipurpose so that she and the area residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.
In Saturday afternoon(yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe. Another friend provided a fortune-telling by Tarot.
One of the customer requested the friend as the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily.
I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble while they stay in Tokyo.

The cafe just opened.
I'm excited when I think what the cafe will be like 😁


友人がカフェをオープンしました。
メニューは健康食品をメインにしているが、飲食だけでなく、彼女や地元の人達がカフェのオープンスペースを使って、いろんなイベントを開催できる地域密着型多目的カフェにするそうです。
土曜日の午後(昨日)、私はカフェに来店したお客様にハンドマッサージをサービスしました。もう一人の友人はタロット占いをサービスしました。
来店したお客様の一人が英語を勉強しているので、語学学習者同士、または、海外からの訪問者が気楽に参加できるイベントを開催してほしいとリクエストがありました。
私は観光客が東京滞在の間、行きたい所への道を聞いたり、トラブルがあったときに気楽に相談できる場所としてネット広告を出してはどうかと提案しました。

カフェはまだ始まったばかり。
さてカフェは今後どうなることやら。。。

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A New Business

A friend of mine quit her office workjob and started thea cafe business.

In the menu of her cafe, mMainly healthy food and drinks are included.offered on the cafe's menu.

sounds better like this

But not onlyIn addition to food service, she's going to make the cafe community-based /multipurpose, so that she and the area residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.

IOn Saturday afternoon (yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe.

Another friend provided a fortune-telling by Tarot.was giving customers tarot readings.

"tarot readings" is what you were trying to say

One of the customers requested the friend as the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily join.

Since you said above that your friend owns the cafe & that it's community-based, you don't have to repeat who he is giving his request to, since it's already known.

I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet saying that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble while they stay in Tokyo.

The cafe just opened.

I'm excited whenabout what I think what the cafe will be like 😁

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Sounds so exciting!! :D

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shiera

July 5, 2020

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Thank you very much!

A New Business

A friend of mine quit her office workjob and started thea cafe business.

"office job" is the common noun phrase to describe a job at an office.

"a cafe", because "a" is used when we are talking about a cafe in general. We also do not need to use the word business, because it is implied that a cafe is a business. For example, we could say "he opened a store". We would not need to say "he opened a store business".

IOn the menu of her cafe, mainly healthy food and drinks are includlisted. ¶

On her cafe's menu, mainly healthy food and drinks are list
ed.

The common phrase is "on the menu". For example," What's on the menu for tonight?"

"of her cafe" is okay, but it can also be rewritten as possessive "On her cafe's menu"

"Iisted" is used, because it means what is stated on the menu.

But it is not only for food service, s. She's going to make the cafe community-based and multipurpose so that she and the area's residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.. ¶

"it is" needed to refer back to the cafe and provide a missing predicate. "for" is a preposition to refer to what the cafe is used for.

"community-based" and "multipurpose" are two separate words, so we use "and" to separate them.

"area's residents" we need to show possessive that the residents belong to the area.

I deleted "in the cafe as well", because it is already implied that the cafe's space is being used, since you mentioned it will not only be for food service.

IOn Saturday afternoon(yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe.

"on" is used whenever we talk about days. For example, "I'll see you on Monday." "The meeting is on Friday."

Another friend provided a fortune-telling bywith Tarot cards.

"fortune telling" is an activity, so we do not need "a".

"with" to refer to what your friend was using, which are "Tarot cards".

One of the customers requested the friend awho is the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily.

"who" is a pronoun to refer to your friend.

I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble, while they stay in Tokyo.

"the" is not needed, because we are not specific about directions in this case. Example would be "Please give me the directions to get to Tokyo" compared to " I'm lost so I need to ask for directions".

The cafe just opened.

I'm excited when I think what the cafe will be like 😁

Feedback

This cafe sounds like an exciting place to be. I wish you and your friends the best of luck. Thank you for sharing and please let me know if you have any questions.

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shiera

July 6, 2020

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Thank you very much for correcting!! Your explanations help me learn the real English😄
Yes! I'll help her to make the cafe nice😃

A New Business

A friend of mine quit her office work and started the cafe business.

A friend of mine quit her office workjob and started thea cafe business.

A friend of mine quit her office workjob and started thea cafe business.

In the menu of her cafe, mainly healthy food and drinks are included.

In the menu of her cafe, mMainly healthy food and drinks are included.offered on the cafe's menu.

IOn the menu of her cafe, mainly healthy food and drinks are includlisted. ¶

On her cafe's menu, mainly healthy food and drinks are list
ed.

But not only food service, she's going to make the cafe community-based multipurpose so that she and the area residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.

But not onlyIn addition to food service, she's going to make the cafe community-based /multipurpose, so that she and the area residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.

But it is not only for food service, s. She's going to make the cafe community-based and multipurpose so that she and the area's residents can have various kinds of events using the space in the cafe as well.. ¶

In Saturday afternoon(yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe.

IOn Saturday afternoon (yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe.

IOn Saturday afternoon(yesterday), I provided a hand massage to the customers in the cafe.

Another friend provided a fortune-telling by Tarot.

Another friend provided a fortune-telling by Tarot.was giving customers tarot readings.

Another friend provided a fortune-telling bywith Tarot cards.

One of the customer requested the friend as the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily.

One of the customers requested the friend as the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily join.

One of the customers requested the friend awho is the cafe owner to have a meetup for language learners and an event for visitors from other countries to join easily.

I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble while they stay in Tokyo.

I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet saying that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble while they stay in Tokyo.

I suggested that she should place an ad on the internet that the cafe is a place where overseas tourists can easily ask for the directions and talk about anything when they are in trouble, while they stay in Tokyo.

The cafe just opened.

I'm excited when I think what the cafe will be like 😁

I'm excited whenabout what I think what the cafe will be like 😁

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